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When I went to at work I didn't compete to the other. To play as best as I can I had to practice as more as I can. Absolutely all most of people will to do too. But I felt stressed out. Our performance skill appear immediately if it is good or bad in front of another member. Folling result we move in seat to play and some artist has territorial. So I lost confidence if I will able to do it or not. I used to lesson to kids for earn a money. So to quite a there was not regret.

When I went to at work I didn't compete to the other. To play as best as I can I had to practice as more as I can. Absolutely all most of people will to do too. But I felt stressed out. Our performance skill appear immediately if it is good or bad in front of another member. Folling result we move in seat to play and some artist has territorial. So I lost confidence if I will able to do it or not. I used to lesson to kids for earn a money. So to quite a there was not regret.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: When I went to at work I didn't compete to the other.
    Corrected: When I went to work, I didn’t compete with others.
    Explanation:

    • "Went to at work" → "Went to work" (Remove "at"; "go to work" is the correct phrase.)
    • "Compete to" → "Compete with" (The correct preposition is "with" after "compete.")
    • "The other" → "Others" (Use "others" when referring to people in general.)
  2. Original: To play as best as I can I had to practice as more as I can.
    Corrected: To perform at my best, I had to practice as much as possible.
    Explanation:

    • "Play as best as I can" → "Perform at my best" (More natural phrasing.)
    • "Practice as more as I can" → "Practice as much as possible" ("More" is incorrect; "as much as possible" is correct.)
  3. Original: Absolutely all most of people will to do too.
    Corrected: Almost all people will do the same.
    Explanation:

    • "Absolutely all most of people" → "Almost all people" ("Almost all" is correct; "absolutely all most" is incorrect.)
    • "Will to do too" → "Will do the same" ("Will" should not be followed by "to"; use "will do.")
  4. Original: But I felt stressed out.
    Corrected: However, I felt stressed.
    Explanation:

    • "But" → "However," (In formal writing, "However" is preferred.)
    • "Stressed out" → "Stressed" ("Stressed out" is informal; "stressed" is more natural here.)
  5. Original: Our performance skill appear immediately if it is good or bad in front of another member.
    Corrected: Our performance skills were immediately visible to other members, whether good or bad.
    Explanation:

    • "Performance skill" → "Performance skills" (Use plural "skills.")
    • "Appear" → "Were immediately visible" ("Appear" is incorrect in this context; "were visible" fits better.)
    • "In front of another member" → "To other members" (More natural phrasing.)
  6. Original: Folling result we move in seat to play and some artist has territorial.
    Corrected: Depending on the results, we changed seats to play, and some artists were territorial.
    Explanation:

    • "Folling result" → "Depending on the results" ("Folling" is incorrect; "depending on the results" is the correct phrase.)
    • "We move in seat" → "We changed seats" ("Move in seat" is unnatural; "changed seats" is correct.)
    • "Some artist has territorial" → "Some artists were territorial" ("Has territorial" is incorrect; "were territorial" is correct.)
  7. Original: So I lost confidence if I will able to do it or not.
    Corrected: So I lost confidence in whether I would be able to do it or not.
    Explanation:

    • "If I will able" → "Whether I would be able" (Use "whether" instead of "if" and "would be able" instead of "will able.")
  8. Original: I used to lesson to kids for earn a money.
    Corrected: I used to give lessons to kids to earn money.
    Explanation:

    • "Lesson to kids" → "Give lessons to kids" (The correct verb is "give lessons.")
    • "For earn a money" → "To earn money" ("For" is incorrect; "to earn" is correct. "A money" is incorrect; just say "money.")
  9. Original: So to quite a there was not regret.
    Corrected: So quitting there was not a regret.
    Explanation:

    • "To quite a" → "Quitting" ("Quite" is incorrect; the correct verb form is "quitting.")
    • "There was not regret" → "There was not a regret" (Use "a regret" for correct grammar.)

Final Edited Version:

When I went to work, I didn’t compete with others. To perform at my best, I had to practice as much as possible. Almost all people would do the same. However, I felt stressed.

Our performance skills were immediately visible to other members, whether good or bad. Depending on the results, we changed seats to play, and some artists were territorial.

So I lost confidence in whether I would be able to do it or not. I used to give lessons to kids to earn money. So quitting there was not a regret.


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