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We spent at a hotel to stay and using faciliticses like a vacation. After my son's been learning swim,he usually do swim. It's perfect to do more enjoy. Faciliticses are calm overall so we used to more leisurely. I had some bread that it's been popular lately. we waited for 30mimutes.then we enjoyed a buffet at the hotel.It's expensive but we wanted having a good mood. We congrate to myson turns 11ages. My son told me I shamed that I've not eaten more.he loved there. Anyway it was great times.

We spent at a hotel to stay and using faciliticses like a vacation. After my son's been learning swim,he usually do swim. It's perfect to do more enjoy. Faciliticses are calm overall so we used to more leisurely. I had some bread that it's been popular lately. we waited for 30mimutes.then we enjoyed a buffet at the hotel.It's expensive but we wanted having a good mood. We congrate to myson turns 11ages. My son told me I shamed that I've not eaten more.he loved there. Anyway it was great times.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. We spent at a hotel to stay and using faciliticses like a vacation.
    We stayed at a hotel and used the facilities as if we were on vacation.
    Explanation: "Spent" is incorrect because "spend" is usually followed by "time" (e.g., We spent time at the hotel). "Using" should be changed to "used" for proper tense agreement. "Faciliticses" is a misspelling of "facilities."

  2. After my son's been learning swim, he usually do swim.
    After my son started learning to swim, he usually swims.
    Explanation: "Been learning swim" is incorrect; it should be "started learning to swim." "Do swim" is incorrect; "swims" should be used for proper subject-verb agreement.

  3. It's perfect to do more enjoy.
    It’s perfect for enjoying even more.
    Explanation: "To do more enjoy" is incorrect; "enjoy" is a verb and should follow a proper structure like "perfect for enjoying."

  4. Faciliticses are calm overall so we used to more leisurely.
    The facilities were calm overall, so we enjoyed them in a relaxed way.
    Explanation: "Faciliticses" should be "facilities." "Used to more leisurely" is incorrect and unclear, so it is reworded for better clarity.

  5. I had some bread that it's been popular lately.
    I had some bread that has been popular lately.
    Explanation: "It's been" should be changed to "has been" for correct grammar in describing a recent trend.

  6. We waited for 30mimutes.
    We waited for 30 minutes.
    Explanation: "30mimutes" is a typo; it should be "30 minutes."

  7. Then we enjoyed a buffet at the hotel. It's expensive but we wanted having a good mood.
    Then we enjoyed a buffet at the hotel. It was expensive, but we wanted to have a good time.
    Explanation: "Having a good mood" is incorrect; it should be "have a good time." "It's expensive" should be changed to "It was expensive" for past tense consistency.

  8. We congrate to myson turns 11ages.
    We congratulated my son on turning 11 years old.
    Explanation: "Congrate" should be "congratulated." "To" is unnecessary. "Turns 11ages" should be "turning 11 years old."

  9. My son told me I shamed that I've not eaten more.
    My son told me he felt ashamed that he didn’t eat more.
    Explanation: "I shamed" is incorrect; it should be "he felt ashamed." "I've not eaten more" should be "he didn’t eat more" for clarity.

  10. He loved there.
    He loved it there.
    Explanation: "Loved there" is incorrect; "loved it there" is the correct phrasing.

  11. Anyway it was great times.
    Anyway, it was a great time.
    Explanation: "Great times" should be "a great time" for singular use. A comma is added after "Anyway" for better readability.


Final Edited Version

We stayed at a hotel and used the facilities as if we were on vacation. After my son started learning to swim, he usually swims. It’s perfect for enjoying even more. The facilities were calm overall, so we enjoyed them in a relaxed way. I had some bread that has been popular lately.

We waited for 30 minutes, then we enjoyed a buffet at the hotel. It was expensive, but we wanted to have a good time. We congratulated my son on turning 11 years old. My son told me he felt ashamed that he didn’t eat more. He loved it there.

Anyway, it was a great time.


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