Last Monday, my mom applied online for the exam. However, the office called with a document problem the next day. They requested re-registration, saying that starting this year, they will only accept the prescribed format. My mom called the school I went to right away. We didn't expect that we would have to go to school three times. For that reason, I took my phone English class at the school's playground.
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Here are the corrections:
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Original: Last Monday, my mom applied online for the exam.
Corrected: Last Monday, my mom applied for the exam online.
Explanation: "Applied for the exam online" is the correct word order. The verb apply for takes the object "the exam," and "online" should come after to clarify the method. -
Original: However, the office called with a document problem the next day.
Corrected: However, the office called the next day about a document issue.
Explanation: "With a document problem" is unnatural. "About a document issue" is more appropriate because issue sounds more formal and professional in this context. -
Original: They requested re-registration, saying that starting this year, they will only accept the prescribed format.
Corrected: They requested re-registration, stating that, starting this year, they would only accept the prescribed format.
Explanation: "Saying" is too informal; "stating" is a better choice in a formal or official context. "Will" should be changed to would because the sentence is referring to a statement made in the past. -
Original: My mom called the school I went to right away.
Corrected: My mom immediately called the school I attended.
Explanation: "Right away" is correct but "immediately" sounds more natural in formal writing. "Went to" is informal; "attended" is more precise. -
Original: We didn't expect that we would have to go to school three times.
Corrected: We didn’t expect to have to visit the school three times.
Explanation: "Go to school" is correct but "visit the school" is a better fit here, as it emphasizes multiple visits rather than just attending. -
Original: For that reason, I took my phone English class at the school's playground.
Corrected: Because of that, I took my phone English class in the school playground.
Explanation: "For that reason" is grammatically correct but a bit formal for this sentence. "Because of that" sounds more natural. Also, "at the school's playground" should be "in the school playground" because "in" is used when referring to a defined enclosed area.
Revised Text:
Last Monday, my mom applied for the exam online. However, the office called the next day about a document issue. They requested re-registration, stating that, starting this year, they would only accept the prescribed format.
My mom immediately called the school I attended. We didn’t expect to have to visit the school three times. Because of that, I took my phone English class in the school playground.
