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I went to some famouse YouTuber's lecture . He is known for caring only boys in korea . He is famouse with a treats to mom who has a boys counsellings. All of his says seemed like my son and I conversation and having a trouble surprisingly. it was very fun and felt guilty. I felt again it is different between girl and boy. I've detrimened that don't tell him what to do everything and keeping wait and see again. Definitely my son is very growing up well and he has a lot of advantages.

I went to some famouse YouTuber's lecture . He is known for caring only boys in korea . He is famouse with a treats to mom who has a boys counsellings. All of his says seemed like my son and I conversation and having a trouble surprisingly. it was very fun and felt guilty. I felt again it is different between girl and boy. I've detrimened that don't tell him what to do everything and keeping wait and see again. Definitely my son is very growing up well and he has a lot of advantages.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I went to some famouse YouTuber's lecture.
    Corrected: I went to a famous YouTuber's lecture.
    Explanation: "Some" is incorrect here; "a" is more appropriate when referring to one specific person. "Famouse" is a spelling mistake; the correct spelling is "famous."

  2. Original: He is known for caring only boys in Korea.
    Corrected: He is known for focusing only on boys in Korea.
    Explanation: "Caring only boys" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "focusing only on boys" because "care for" is used differently (e.g., "He cares for boys").

  3. Original: He is famouse with a treats to mom who has a boys counsellings.
    Corrected: He is famous for offering advice to mothers who have sons.
    Explanation: "Famouse" is misspelled ("famous" is correct). "With a treats to mom who has a boys counsellings" is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase should be "famous for offering advice to mothers who have sons."

  4. Original: All of his says seemed like my son and I conversation and having a trouble surprisingly.
    Corrected: Everything he said felt like my son and I were having a conversation and experiencing the same troubles.
    Explanation: "All of his says" is incorrect. It should be "Everything he said." "Seemed like my son and I conversation" is unnatural; the correct phrase is "felt like my son and I were having a conversation." "Having a trouble" should be "experiencing the same troubles."

  5. Original: It was very fun and felt guilty.
    Corrected: It was very fun, but I also felt guilty.
    Explanation: "Felt guilty" needs a subject (who felt guilty?), so "I also felt guilty" is correct. "And felt guilty" should be "but I also felt guilty" to show contrast.

  6. Original: I felt again it is different between girl and boy.
    Corrected: Once again, I realized that boys and girls are different.
    Explanation: "I felt again" is unnatural; "Once again, I realized" is better. "It is different between girl and boy" should be "boys and girls are different."

  7. Original: I've detrimened that don't tell him what to do everything and keeping wait and see again.
    Corrected: I’ve decided not to tell him what to do all the time and to wait and see instead.
    Explanation: "Detrimened" is a spelling mistake; "determined" is correct, but "decided" sounds more natural here. "That don't tell him what to do everything" is incorrect; "not to tell him what to do all the time" is correct. "Keeping wait and see again" should be "to wait and see instead."

  8. Original: Definitely my son is very growing up well and he has a lot of advantages.
    Corrected: My son is definitely growing up well, and he has many great qualities.
    Explanation: "Definitely my son is very growing up well" is unnatural. The correct structure is "My son is definitely growing up well." "He has a lot of advantages" is unnatural in this context; "he has many great qualities" is better.


Final Edited Version

I went to a famous YouTuber's lecture. He is known for focusing only on boys in Korea. He is famous for offering advice to mothers who have sons. Everything he said felt like my son and I were having a conversation and experiencing the same troubles. It was very fun, but I also felt guilty.

Once again, I realized that boys and girls are different. I’ve decided not to tell my son what to do all the time and to wait and see instead. My son is definitely growing up well, and he has many great qualities.


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