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Community service should be man

Community service should be mandatory for all students.

I think making all students do community service is wrong. And here's why.
First, today we have a high college competitioon rate. For example, many students study to go to good college such as Harvard, Cambride, Oxford. But if a student goes to volunteering and doesn't study at that time, his or her score will surely decrease. And if this situation continues, he will not be able to go to the good college and he will not get a good job

Community service should be mandatory for all students.

I think making all students do community service is wrong. And here's why.
First, today we have a high college competitioon rate. For example, many students study to go to good college such as Harvard, Cambride, Oxford. But if a student goes to volunteering and doesn't study at that time, his or her score will surely decrease. And if this situation continues, he will not be able to go to the good college and he will not get a good job

 

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CORRECTION: 

 

Community Service Should Not Be Mandatory for All Students

I believe that making all students participate in community service is wrong, and here’s why.

First, there is a high level of competition for college admissions today. Many students study hard to get into prestigious colleges such as Harvard, Cambridge, and Oxford. If a student spends time volunteering instead of studying, their academic performance may suffer. This could lead to lower scores, making it more difficult for them to gain admission to a good college and, consequently, secure a good job.

Secondly, requiring all students to volunteer infringes on their rights. While there are many unfortunate people in need, students should have the right to choose whether or not to volunteer. For example, when I see someone in need, I have the authority to decide whether I will help them or not.

Lastly, some people argue that volunteering helps students understand how different types of people live, but this is only partially true. While some students may gain valuable insights from volunteering, others might feel stressed or overwhelmed, which could detract from their overall experience.

 

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