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We went to ski resort. When I was tweenty years, I learned to ski at first. It was very scared,so I've never go ski and i didn't
wanted to it again since that time. Even talking lift felt scared. My son learned to go ski at first. He worried that it makes hurts his leg.he said me some friend talked my son it might be hurt. Even though he was scared but he learned to go ski in beginer slope with coach.he felt thrill. He said "mom I am satisfied through once experience I don't want to ski again "

We went to ski resort. When I was tweenty years, I learned to ski at first. It was very scared,so I've never go ski and i didn't
wanted to it again since that time. Even talking lift felt scared. My son learned to go ski at first. He worried that it makes hurts his leg.he said me some friend talked my son it might be hurt. Even though he was scared but he learned to go ski in beginer slope with coach.he felt thrill. He said "mom I am satisfied through once experience I don't want to ski again "

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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: We went to ski resort.
    Corrected: We went to a ski resort.
    Explanation: "Ski resort" needs an article ("a") to make it grammatically correct. "A" is used for singular, countable nouns.

  2. Original: When I was tweenty years, I learned to ski at first.
    Corrected: When I was twenty years old, I learned to ski for the first time.
    Explanation: The correct form is "twenty years old" instead of "tweenty years." Additionally, "at first" should be replaced with "for the first time" to sound more natural in this context.

  3. Original: It was very scared,so I've never go ski and i didn't wanted to it again since that time.
    Corrected: I was very scared, so I've never gone skiing, and I didn't want to do it again since that time.
    Explanation: The subject "I" should be used instead of "it" after "was scared." "Go" should be "gone" as the correct past participle form for the present perfect. "Wanted to it" should be "wanted to do it" to make sense in this context.

  4. Original: Even talking lift felt scared.
    Corrected: Even taking the lift felt scary.
    Explanation: "Talking" should be replaced with "taking," and "felt scared" should be "felt scary" to use the appropriate adjective form.

  5. Original: My son learned to go ski at first.
    Corrected: My son learned to ski for the first time.
    Explanation: "Go ski" is incorrect. The correct form is "learned to ski." "At first" should be "for the first time" to sound natural.

  6. Original: He worried that it makes hurts his leg.he said me some friend talked my son it might be hurt.
    Corrected: He was worried that it might hurt his leg. He told me that some of his friends said it might hurt.
    Explanation: "Worried that it makes hurts" is incorrect, it should be "worried that it might hurt." "He said me" should be "He told me." "Some friend talked my son" should be "some of his friends said."

  7. Original: Even though he was scared but he learned to go ski in beginer slope with coach.he felt thrill.
    Corrected: Even though he was scared, he learned to ski on the beginner slope with a coach. He felt thrilled.
    Explanation: "But" is unnecessary after "even though." "Go ski" should be "learned to ski." "Beginer" should be spelled as "beginner," and "thrill" should be "thrilled" for correct usage.

  8. Original: He said "mom I am satisfied through once experience I don't want to ski again "
    Corrected: He said, "Mom, I am satisfied with my experience, but I don't want to ski again."
    Explanation: Add commas to separate direct speech and the rest of the sentence. "Satisfied through once experience" should be "satisfied with my experience."


Final Corrected Text:

We went to a ski resort. When I was twenty years old, I learned to ski for the first time. I was very scared, so I've never gone skiing, and I didn't want to do it again since that time. Even taking the lift felt scary. My son learned to ski for the first time. He was worried that it might hurt his leg. He told me that some of his friends said it might hurt. Even though he was scared, he learned to ski on the beginner slope with a coach. He felt thrilled. He said, "Mom, I am satisfied with my experience, but I don't want to ski again."


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