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I visited my grandma last weekend. She and I went to walking in a mountain near her house. She found some shepherd's purse that is called naeng-i in Korean and gathered it a lot. I was looking for it with her as well. On the succeeding morning, my mom cooked bean paste soup with it. I could only eat a little because it's not a familiar taste and smell to me yet. But I had one's fill of my grandma's kimchi which is my favorite food. I felt so happy that I spent with my grandma.

I visited my grandma last weekend. She and I went to walking in a mountain near her house. She found some shepherd's purse that is called naeng-i in Korean and gathered it a lot. I was looking for it with her as well. On the succeeding morning, my mom cooked bean paste soup with it. I could only eat a little because it's not a familiar taste and smell to me yet. But I had one's fill of my grandma's kimchi which is my favorite food. I felt so happy that I spent with my grandma.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: She and I went to walking in a mountain near her house.
    Corrected: She and I went walking in the mountains near her house.
    Explanation: "Went to walking" is incorrect; the correct phrase is "went walking." Also, "a mountain" is too specific when referring to general outdoor activity—"the mountains" sounds more natural.

  2. Original: She found some shepherd's purse that is called naeng-i in Korean and gathered it a lot.
    Corrected: She found some shepherd’s purse, which is called naeng-i in Korean, and gathered a lot of it.
    Explanation: "That is called" should be "which is called" for smoother phrasing. "Gathered it a lot" is unnatural—"gathered a lot of it" is more natural.

  3. Original: I was looking for it with her as well.
    Corrected: I looked for it with her as well.
    Explanation: "Was looking" is in the past continuous tense, but the simple past "looked" fits better for a completed action.

  4. Original: On the succeeding morning, my mom cooked bean paste soup with it.
    Corrected: The next morning, my mom cooked bean paste soup with it.
    Explanation: "Succeeding morning" sounds too formal and unnatural; "the next morning" is the more natural phrase.

  5. Original: I could only eat a little because it's not a familiar taste and smell to me yet.
    Corrected: I could only eat a little because the taste and smell are still unfamiliar to me.
    Explanation: "It’s" (short for "it is") is incorrect here since the sentence refers to the past. Also, "not a familiar taste and smell" sounds awkward—"the taste and smell are still unfamiliar to me" is smoother.

  6. Original: But I had one's fill of my grandma's kimchi which is my favorite food.
    Corrected: But I had my fill of my grandma’s kimchi, which is my favorite food.
    Explanation: "One’s fill" is too formal and unnatural; "my fill" is the correct phrase. A comma is needed before "which" because it's adding extra information.

  7. Original: I felt so happy that I spent with my grandma.
    Corrected: I felt so happy that I got to spend time with my grandma.
    Explanation: "Spent" needs an object—"spend time with" is the correct phrase.


Final Edited Version:

I visited my grandma last weekend. She and I went walking in the mountains near her house. She found some shepherd’s purse, which is called naeng-i in Korean, and gathered a lot of it. I looked for it with her as well. The next morning, my mom cooked bean paste soup with it. I could only eat a little because the taste and smell are still unfamiliar to me. But I had my fill of my grandma’s kimchi, which is my favorite food. I felt so happy that I got to spend time with my grandma.


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