Yesterday, suddenly my mom called at me. My mom usually works in Korean museum every Sunday for her job. She is a commentator. it snowed again .So some roads was slipperyed to walk. She fell on her butt and she' s hit her hands on the icy road around there. Fortunately I was in nearby there. So I picked her up and went to hospital. Luckily she just got to wear a cast for her finger.It was just fingers ligament sprain. We felt relieved. I thought she gained bone fracture. I worried about her.
==================================================================================================================================
Here are the corrections:
-
Original: Yesterday, suddenly my mom called at me.
Corrected: Yesterday, my mom suddenly called me.
Explanation: "Call at" is incorrect. We say "call someone" instead of "call at someone." -
Original: My mom usually works in Korean museum every Sunday for her job.
Corrected: My mom usually works at a Korean museum every Sunday for her job.
Explanation: We use "at" when referring to locations (e.g., "at a museum"), and "a" is needed before "Korean museum" since it's not referring to a specific museum. -
Original: She is a commentator.
Corrected: She is a commentator.
Explanation: This sentence is already correct. -
Original: it snowed again .So some roads was slipperyed to walk.
Corrected: It snowed again, so some roads were slippery to walk on.
Explanation: The first letter of the sentence should be capitalized ("It"). "Was" should be changed to "were" because "roads" is plural. "Slipperied" is not correct; the correct adjective is "slippery." Also, "to walk" should be followed by "on" for clarity. -
Original: She fell on her butt and she' s hit her hands on the icy road around there.
Corrected: She fell on her butt and hit her hands on the icy road.
Explanation: "She' s" should be "hit" for past tense consistency. "Around there" is unnecessary; "on the icy road" is enough to describe the location. -
Original: Fortunately I was in nearby there.
Corrected: Fortunately, I was nearby.
Explanation: "Nearby there" is redundant. "Nearby" alone works better. -
Original: So I picked her up and went to hospital.
Corrected: So, I picked her up and went to the hospital.
Explanation: "Hospital" needs the definite article "the" when referring to a specific place. -
Original: Luckily she just got to wear a cast for her finger.It was just fingers ligament sprain.
Corrected: Luckily, she only had to wear a cast on her finger. It was just a ligament sprain in her finger.
Explanation: "Got to wear" is awkward; "had to wear" is more natural. "For her finger" is corrected to "on her finger" to indicate where the cast was. "Just fingers ligament sprain" should be "a ligament sprain in her finger" for clarity and correct phrasing. -
Original: We felt relieved.
Corrected: We felt relieved.
Explanation: This sentence is correct. -
Original: I thought she gained bone fracture.
Corrected: I thought she had a bone fracture.
Explanation: "Gained" is incorrect in this context. We say "had a bone fracture" when referring to an injury. -
Original: I worried about her.
Corrected: I was worried about her.
Explanation: The correct tense here is the past continuous "was worried" to express an ongoing feeling.
Final Edited Text:
Yesterday, my mom suddenly called me. My mom usually works at a Korean museum every Sunday for her job. She is a commentator. It snowed again, so some roads were slippery to walk on. She fell on her butt and hit her hands on the icy road. Fortunately, I was nearby. So, I picked her up and went to the hospital. Luckily, she only had to wear a cast on her finger. It was just a ligament sprain in her finger. We felt relieved. I thought she had a bone fracture. I was worried about her.
Key Improvements:
- Adjusted article use (e.g., "at a Korean museum," "to the hospital").
- Corrected past tense and verb forms (e.g., "hit" instead of "she's hit").
- Streamlined some phrases for better flow and clarity (e.g., "only had to wear a cast" instead of "just got to wear a cast").
- Improved word choices (e.g., "ligament sprain in her finger" instead of "fingers ligament sprain").
Keep up the good work! You're improving your sentence structure and grammar steadily. Just focus on consistent tense usage and article placement, and you'll continue to sound more natural in your writing. 😊
