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We went to Honknng last week. After We traveled there for 3days then at first my son and I left to korea. My husband has been worked for 5days in there . Yesterday my husband came home with some honking' souvenirs. It was wonderful trip. Just sightseeing on the streets taking bus or tram and night veiw that I felt good. I like their mood has old and new. He brouht us restaurants where having nice view. I think My son grew up so trip was comfortable and enjoyful. I can't wait next trip

We went to Honknng last week. After We traveled there for 3days then at first my son and I left to korea. My husband has been worked for 5days in there . Yesterday my husband came home with some honking' souvenirs. It was wonderful trip. Just sightseeing on the streets taking bus or tram and night veiw that I felt good. I like their mood has old and new. He brouht us restaurants where having nice view. I think My son grew up so trip was comfortable and enjoyful. I can't wait next trip
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Original:

We went to Honknng last week.
Corrected:
We went to Hong Kong last week.
Explanation:
The typo "Honknng" was corrected to "Hong Kong," the proper name of the location.


Original:

After We traveled there for 3days then at first my son and I left to korea.
Corrected:
After traveling there for three days, my son and I returned to Korea first.
Explanation:

  • Capitalization error: "We" should be lowercase.
  • "3days" should be written as "three days" for proper clarity.
  • "left to Korea" was changed to "returned to Korea" to better express the idea of going back.

Original:

My husband has been worked for 5days in there.
Corrected:
My husband stayed and worked there for five days.
Explanation:

  • "has been worked" is incorrect. Use "stayed and worked" to clarify and correctly conjugate the verbs.
  • "5days" was changed to "five days" for clarity.
  • "in there" was simplified to "there."

Original:

Yesterday my husband came home with some honking' souvenirs.
Corrected:
Yesterday, my husband came home with some Hong Kong souvenirs.
Explanation:

  • The typo "honking'" was corrected to "Hong Kong."
  • Added a comma after "Yesterday" to follow proper punctuation rules.

Original:

It was wonderful trip.
Corrected:
It was a wonderful trip.
Explanation:

  • Added the missing article "a" before "wonderful trip."

Original:

Just sightseeing on the streets taking bus or tram and night veiw that I felt good.
Corrected:
We enjoyed sightseeing on the streets, taking buses or trams, and admiring the night view. It felt good.
Explanation:

  • Clarified and restructured the sentence for readability.
  • Corrected "taking bus" to "taking buses or trams."
  • Fixed the typo "veiw" to "view."
  • Separated the second thought into its own sentence, "It felt good."

Original:

I like their mood has old and new.
Corrected:
I liked the mix of old and new in the city.
Explanation:

  • Simplified and restructured the sentence for clarity.
  • Replaced "mood has old and new" with "mix of old and new" for better understanding.

Original:

He brouht us restaurants where having nice view.
Corrected:
He took us to restaurants with nice views.
Explanation:

  • Fixed the typo "brouht" to "brought."
  • Restructured "where having nice view" to "with nice views" for grammatical correctness.

Original:

I think My son grew up so trip was comfortable and enjoyful.
Corrected:
I think my son has grown up, so the trip was comfortable and enjoyable.
Explanation:

  • "grew up" was changed to "has grown up" to align with the context.
  • "enjoyful" is incorrect; the correct word is "enjoyable."
  • Adjusted capitalization: "My" → "my."

Original:

I can't wait next trip
Corrected:
I can't wait for our next trip.
Explanation:

  • Added "for" to complete the phrase "can't wait for."
  • Added "our" to make it more personal and specific.

Final Edited Text:

We went to Hong Kong last week. After traveling there for three days, my son and I returned to Korea first. My husband stayed and worked there for five days. Yesterday, my husband came home with some Hong Kong souvenirs. It was a wonderful trip. We enjoyed sightseeing on the streets, taking buses or trams, and admiring the night view. It felt good. I liked the mix of old and new in the city. He took us to restaurants with nice views. I think my son has grown up, so the trip was comfortable and enjoyable. I can't wait for our next trip!


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