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My son stared watching youtube. he's been watching is popular in Korean kids . But I don't understand why he whatch. It just addictive, not useful. Absolutely, While he is watching it , he can relives strees. But I'm angry when he wanted to watch for longer than the allowed time. he didn't whining at me before use phone. But he didn't control when it done. I think media's bad effect . So we set his limit time that he can at that time. After 30 minutes his YouTube will be turn out.

My son stared watching youtube. he's been watching is popular in Korean kids . But I don't understand why he whatch. It just addictive, not useful. Absolutely, While he is watching it , he can relives strees. But I'm angry when he wanted to watch for longer than the allowed time. he didn't whining at me before use phone. But he didn't control when it done. I think media's bad effect . So we set his limit time that he can at that time. After 30 minutes his YouTube will be turn out.
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Original Sentence 1:

My son stared watching youtube.
Correction: My son started watching YouTube.
Explanation: The verb "stared" is incorrect here; the correct past tense of "start" is "started." Also, "YouTube" is a proper noun and should be capitalized.


Original Sentence 2:

he's been watching is popular in Korean kids.
Correction: He’s been watching what’s popular among Korean kids.
Explanation: The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding "what's" makes it meaningful, and "among" is more appropriate than "in" to describe a group of people.


Original Sentence 3:

But I don't understand why he whatch.
Correction: But I don’t understand why he watches it.
Explanation: "Whatch" is a misspelling of "watches." Since this is a general statement, the verb should be in present tense ("watches").


Original Sentence 4:

It just addictive, not useful.
Correction: It’s just addictive, not useful.
Explanation: The sentence is missing the verb "is," and "it’s" is the contraction for "it is," which is correct here.


Original Sentence 5:

Absolutely, While he is watching it , he can relives strees.
Correction: While he’s watching it, he can relieve stress.
Explanation: "Relives" is the wrong verb here; "relieve" means to reduce or ease, which fits the context. "Strees" is a misspelling of "stress."


Original Sentence 6:

But I'm angry when he wanted to watch for longer than the allowed time.
Correction: But I get angry when he wants to watch for longer than the allowed time.
Explanation: The use of "wanted" is inconsistent with the present-tense narrative. Changing it to "wants" keeps the tense consistent.


Original Sentence 7:

he didn't whining at me before use phone.
Correction: He didn’t whine at me before using the phone.
Explanation: "Whining" should be in its base form "whine" after "didn't." The phrase "before use phone" needs "using" for proper grammar and clarity.


Original Sentence 8:

But he didn't control when it done.
Correction: But he doesn’t know how to stop when it’s over.
Explanation: "Didn’t control" is awkward here; rephrasing to "doesn’t know how to stop" better fits the context. "When it done" should be "when it’s over" for proper grammar.


Original Sentence 9:

I think media's bad effect .
Correction: I think media has a bad effect.
Explanation: "Media's bad effect" is incomplete. Adding "has" makes it grammatically correct and clearer.


Original Sentence 10:

So we set his limit time that he can at that time.
Correction: So we set a time limit for him.
Explanation: "His limit time that he can at that time" is awkward and redundant. Simplifying it to "a time limit for him" improves clarity.


Original Sentence 11:

After 30 minutes his YouTube will be turn out.
Correction: After 30 minutes, his YouTube will turn off.
Explanation: "Be turn out" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "will turn off."


Final Edited Text:

My son started watching YouTube. He’s been watching what’s popular among Korean kids, but I don’t understand why he watches it. It’s just addictive and not useful. While he’s watching it, he can relieve stress, but I get angry when he wants to watch for longer than the allowed time. He didn’t whine at me before using the phone, but now he doesn’t know how to stop when it’s over. I think media has a bad effect. So, we set a time limit for him. After 30 minutes, his YouTube will turn off.


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