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This weekend we will go to Hong Kong for vacation during 3day. It will be short time because we couldn't get more day. We lived in there for 3years. Even though I can't speak English enough ,it was great time. Always I spent a day like go to trip. But when it became 3 years, My son grew up, when he enroll nursery I felt nervous due to my English skill that don't have enough. Just in time my husband got a good at work in Korea. Sometimes I used to remained there life. I get butterflies this trip.

This weekend we will go to Hong Kong for vacation during 3day. It will be short time because we couldn't get more day. We lived in there for 3years. Even though I can't speak English enough ,it was great time. Always I spent a day like go to trip. But when it became 3 years, My son grew up, when he enroll nursery I felt nervous due to my English skill that don't have enough. Just in time my husband got a good at work in Korea. Sometimes I used to remained there life. I get butterflies this trip.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: This weekend we will go to Hong Kong for vacation during 3day.
    Corrected: This weekend, we will go to Hong Kong for a 3-day vacation.
    Explanation: "During 3day" is incorrect; it should be "for a 3-day vacation" to properly indicate the duration.

  2. Original: It will be short time because we couldn't get more day.
    Corrected: It will be a short trip because we couldn't get more days.
    Explanation: "Short time" should be "short trip," and "more day" should be "more days" for correct plural usage.

  3. Original: We lived in there for 3years.
    Corrected: We lived there for 3 years.
    Explanation: "In there" is unnecessary; just "there" is correct. Add a space between "3" and "years."

  4. Original: Even though I can't speak English enough ,it was great time.
    Corrected: Even though I couldn't speak enough English, it was a great time.
    Explanation: "Can't" should be "couldn't" to match the past tense, and "speak English enough" should be "speak enough English" for better word order.

  5. Original: Always I spent a day like go to trip.
    Corrected: I always spent my days like I was on a trip.
    Explanation: The phrase needs restructuring to make sense. "Go to trip" should be "like I was on a trip."

  6. Original: But when it became 3 years, My son grew up, when he enroll nursery I felt nervous due to my English skill that don't have enough.
    Corrected: But after 3 years, my son grew up, and when he enrolled in nursery, I felt nervous because my English skills were not good enough.
    Explanation: Corrected tense and grammar issues: "enroll" should be "enrolled," and "that don't have enough" should be "were not good enough."

  7. Original: Just in time my husband got a good at work in Korea.
    Corrected: Just in time, my husband got a good job in Korea.
    Explanation: "Got a good at work" should be "got a good job" for clarity.

  8. Original: Sometimes I used to remained there life.
    Corrected: Sometimes, I used to reminisce about life there.
    Explanation: "Remained" should be "reminisce" to reflect the correct meaning.

  9. Original: I get butterflies this trip.
    Corrected: I get butterflies thinking about this trip.
    Explanation: Adding "thinking about" clarifies that the excitement is about the upcoming trip.

Revised Text

This weekend, we will go to Hong Kong for a 3-day vacation. It will be a short trip because we couldn't get more days. We lived there for 3 years. Even though I couldn't speak enough English, it was a great time. I always spent my days like I was on a trip. But after 3 years, my son grew up, and when he enrolled in nursery, I felt nervous because my English skills were not good enough. Just in time, my husband got a good job in Korea. Sometimes, I used to reminisce about life there. I get butterflies thinking about this trip.


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