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I have been doing plates for 5 years. I usually I do it for twice in week. recently I stared private class. Because it usually 4 person in group. sometimes instructor just explain to us without touch and fixing body. So sometimes I didn't know what posture is right, if it work doing keeps posture. Private instructor help me whatever every posture for fit me. She get detail correction.So I feel that using my muscle I think I can keep right good posture. I feel getting better.

I have been doing plates for 5 years. I usually I do it for twice in week. recently I stared private class. Because it usually 4 person in group. sometimes instructor just explain to us without touch and fixing body. So sometimes I didn't know what posture is right, if it work doing keeps posture. Private instructor help me whatever every posture for fit me. She get detail correction.So I feel that using my muscle I think I can keep right good posture. I feel getting better.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I have been doing plates for 5 years.
    Corrected: I have been doing Pilates for 5 years.
    Explanation: "Plates" should be changed to "Pilates," which is the correct term for the exercise method.

  2. Original: I usually I do it for twice in week.
    Corrected: I usually do it twice a week.
    Explanation: The extra "I" is redundant. "Twice a week" is the correct expression for frequency.

  3. Original: recently I stared private class.
    Corrected: Recently, I started private classes.
    Explanation: "Stared" should be "started." Also, "private class" should be plural ("private classes") because you are referring to more than one lesson.

  4. Original: Because it usually 4 person in group.
    Corrected: Because there are usually 4 people in the group.
    Explanation: The phrase needs to be restructured. "There are" is necessary to introduce the subject. "Person" should be "people," which is the correct plural form.

  5. Original: sometimes instructor just explain to us without touch and fixing body.
    Corrected: Sometimes the instructor just explains to us without touching and correcting our bodies.
    Explanation: "Instructor" needs the definite article "the" to make the sentence clear. "Explain" should be "explains" (subject-verb agreement). "Touch" and "fixing" should be in their verb forms ("touching" and "correcting").

  6. Original: So sometimes I didn't know what posture is right, if it work doing keeps posture.
    Corrected: So sometimes I didn't know which posture was right, or if it worked to maintain the posture.
    Explanation: "What" should be changed to "which" when referring to specific options. "Is" should be "was" to maintain past tense consistency. "Work doing keeps posture" is unclear and should be rephrased as "worked to maintain the posture."

  7. Original: Private instructor help me whatever every posture for fit me.
    Corrected: My private instructor helps me with every posture that fits me.
    Explanation: "Private instructor" needs the article "my" to show possession. "Help me whatever every posture" should be rephrased as "helps me with every posture." "For fit me" should be "that fits me."

  8. Original: She get detail correction.
    Corrected: She gives detailed corrections.
    Explanation: "Get" should be changed to "gives" to match the subject. "Detail" should be "detailed," and "correction" should be plural ("corrections").

  9. Original: So I feel that using my muscle I think I can keep right good posture.
    Corrected: So I feel that by using my muscles, I think I can maintain the right posture.
    Explanation: "Using my muscle" should be "using my muscles" (plural form). "Keep right good posture" is awkward and should be rephrased as "maintain the right posture."

  10. Original: I feel getting better.
    Corrected: I feel like I'm getting better.
    Explanation: "Getting better" needs the phrase "feel like I'm" to make the sentence grammatically correct.


Revised Text:

I have been doing Pilates for five (5) years. I usually do it twice a week. Recently, I started private classes because there are usually four (4) people in the group. Sometimes, the instructor just explains to us without touching or correcting our bodies. So, sometimes I didn't know which posture was right, or if it worked to maintain the posture. My private instructor helps me with every posture that fits me. She gives detailed corrections. So, I feel that by using my muscles, I think I can maintain the right posture. I feel like I'm getting better.


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