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I 've never set a meal for mom's birthday. Absolutely we used to had a eat out. But I don't know I didn't a idea prepare for it myself. When law-pareants come to my home I do lunch or dinner for them. I even consider about menu to make a good impressive on them. But when meet my parents,my mom got ready for our or eat out. I suddenly I was sorry to them. I made a shabu because it has all of vegetables and beef so it make delicious and healthy. My mom favorite thing. We had a wonderful time.

I 've never set a meal for mom's birthday. Absolutely we used to had a eat out. But I don't know I didn't a idea prepare for it myself. When law-pareants come to my home I do lunch or dinner for them. I even consider about menu to make a good impressive on them. But when meet my parents,my mom got ready for our or eat out. I suddenly I was sorry to them. I made a shabu because it has all of vegetables and beef so it make delicious and healthy. My mom favorite thing. We had a wonderful time.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I 've never set a meal for mom's birthday.
    Corrected: I've never prepared a meal for my mom's birthday.
    Explanation: "Set a meal" is awkward in this context. "Prepared a meal" is more appropriate for describing cooking or organizing food.

  2. Original: Absolutely we used to had a eat out.
    Corrected: We used to always eat out.
    Explanation: "Absolutely" is unnecessary, and "had a eat out" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "eat out," without "had."

  3. Original: But I don't know I didn't a idea prepare for it myself.
    Corrected: But I don't know why I never thought of preparing it myself.
    Explanation: The sentence is missing proper structure and a verb. Adding "why" and "thought" makes it clearer.

  4. Original: When law-pareants come to my home I do lunch or dinner for them.
    Corrected: When my in-laws come to my home, I prepare lunch or dinner for them.
    Explanation: "Law-parents" is incorrect; the proper term is "in-laws." Also, "do" should be "prepare."

  5. Original: I even consider about menu to make a good impressive on them.
    Corrected: I even consider the menu to make a good impression on them.
    Explanation: "Consider about" is incorrect; it should be "consider." Also, "impressive" should be "impression."

  6. Original: But when meet my parents, my mom got ready for our or eat out.
    Corrected: But when I meet my parents, my mom prepares the meal or we eat out.
    Explanation: Missing the subject "I" and correcting "got ready for our or eat out" to a clearer structure.

  7. Original: I suddenly I was sorry to them.
    Corrected: I suddenly felt sorry for them.
    Explanation: "Was sorry to them" should be "felt sorry for them."

  8. Original: I made a shabu because it has all of vegetables and beef so it make delicious and healthy.
    Corrected: I made shabu-shabu because it has lots of vegetables and beef, making it delicious and healthy.
    Explanation: "A shabu" should be "shabu-shabu," and "make" should be "making" for correct grammar.

  9. Original: My mom favorite thing.
    Corrected: It's my mom's favorite dish.
    Explanation: The possessive form "mom's" is needed, and "thing" should be "dish."

  10. Original: We had a wonderful time.
    Corrected: We had a wonderful time.
    Explanation: This sentence is correct.


Revised Text:

I've never prepared a meal for my mom's birthday. We used to always eat out. But I don't know why I never thought of preparing it myself. When my in-laws come to my home, I prepare lunch or dinner for them. I even consider the menu to make a good impression on them. But when I meet my parents, my mom prepares the meal or we eat out. I suddenly felt sorry for them. I made shabu-shabu because it has lots of vegetables and beef, making it delicious and healthy. It's my mom's favorite dish. We had a wonderful time.


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