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If sons supposed to more ,husband is like "why do you a lot make him " He agree to do basically study and exercise more. But I think the earlier starting then the more get effect. There are a lot of good surroundings. Most of kids do experience all of part. So he will catch up them he has to do similar.Of couse I have a belief. to controlling we do that. If my son get a stress I will stop. I told to him. If you get endure then you would be confident guy and you would have good opportunity.

If sons supposed to more ,husband is like "why do you a lot make him " He agree to do basically study and exercise more. But I think the earlier starting then the more get effect. There are a lot of good surroundings. Most of kids do experience all of part. So he will catch up them he has to do similar.Of couse I have a belief. to controlling we do that. If my son get a stress I will stop. I told to him. If you get endure then you would be confident guy and you would have good opportunity.
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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

  1. Original: If sons supposed to more, husband is like "why do you a lot make him."

    • Corrected: If sons are supposed to do more, my husband says, "Why do you make him do so much?"
    • Explanation: The original sentence lacks proper subject-verb agreement and clarity. "Supposed to more" needs a verb to complete the thought. "Why do you a lot make him" is restructured for clarity.
  2. Original: He agree to do basically study and exercise more.

    • Corrected: He agrees that our son should study and exercise more.
    • Explanation: The verb "agree" should be in the third person singular form "agrees." The sentence was also rephrased for clarity.
  3. Original: But I think the earlier starting then the more get effect.

    • Corrected: But I think starting earlier will have a greater effect.
    • Explanation: The sentence is restructured for grammar and clarity. "The earlier starting" and "the more get effect" are corrected for natural expression.
  4. Original: There are a lot of good surroundings.

    • Corrected: There is a good environment.
    • Explanation: "Surroundings" is changed to "environment" to better fit the context. "A lot of good surroundings" is simplified to make the sentence clearer.
  5. Original: Most of kids do experience all of part.

    • Corrected: Most kids experience all parts of it.
    • Explanation: "Most of kids" is corrected to "Most kids," and "all of part" is clarified to "all parts of it."
  6. Original: So he will catch up them he has to do similar.

    • Corrected: So, to catch up with them, he has to do something similar.
    • Explanation: The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar. "Catch up them" should be "catch up with them."
  7. Original: Of couse I have a belief. to controlling we do that.

    • Corrected: Of course, I believe in guiding him through this process.
    • Explanation: The sentence is corrected for grammar and clarity. "To controlling" is rephrased to "in guiding him."
  8. Original: If my son get a stress I will stop.

    • Corrected: If my son gets stressed, I will stop.
    • Explanation: "Get" should be "gets" for subject-verb agreement. "A stress" is corrected to "stressed."
  9. Original: I told to him.

    • Corrected: I told him.
    • Explanation: "To" is unnecessary after "told."
  10. Original: If you get endure then you would be confident guy and you would have good opportunity.

    • Corrected: If you endure, you will become a confident person and have good opportunities.
    • Explanation: The sentence is rephrased for better grammar and clarity. "Get endure" is corrected to "endure."


Final Edited Text

If sons are supposed to do more, my husband says, "Why do you make him do so much?" He agrees that our son should study and exercise more. But I think starting earlier will have a greater effect. There is a good environment. Most kids experience all parts of it. So, to catch up with them, he has to do something similar. Of course, I believe in guiding him through this process. If my son gets stressed, I will stop. I told him, "If you endure, you will become a confident person and have good opportunities."


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