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It comes New year. In korea it celebrates
the Lunnar year's day. But we don't enough time due to law-memorial sevice. So my family with my parents and sister do celebrate the solar years day. I wish my parent' s healthy life and my older sister who don't get married, can be married soon. Usually older children give some money to parents. It's like korean manner in holidays. I've set a goal to improve my English do exercise constantly, do not nag my son. I will try to keep resolutions.

It comes New year. In korea it celebrates
the Lunnar year's day. But we don't enough time due to law-memorial sevice. So my family with my parents and sister do celebrate the solar years day. I wish my parent' s healthy life and my older sister who don't get married, can be married soon. Usually older children give some money to parents. It's like korean manner in holidays. I've set a goal to improve my English do exercise constantly, do not nag my son. I will try to keep resolutions.
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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

  1. Original: It comes New year.
    Explanation: This is an awkward way to express the arrival of the New Year. "It comes" is not natural in this context.
    Corrected: The New Year has arrived.

  2. Original: In korea it celebrates the Lunnar year's day.
    Explanation: "Korea" should be capitalized as it is a proper noun. "It celebrates" is incorrect since the subject should refer to people, not a country. "Lunnar" is a misspelling of "Lunar."
    Corrected: In Korea, people celebrate the Lunar New Year.

  3. Original: But we don't enough time due to law-memorial sevice.
    Explanation: "Don't" needs an auxiliary verb for proper grammar ("don’t have"). "Law-memorial sevice" seems to be a misspelling of "ancestral memorial service." The sentence also lacks clarity and needs restructuring.
    Corrected: However, we don’t have enough time because of the ancestral memorial service.

  4. Original: So my family with my parents and sister do celebrate the solar years day.
    Explanation: "Do celebrate" is unnecessary; simply "celebrate" is correct. "Solar years day" is awkward and should be "Solar New Year."
    Corrected: So, my family, along with my parents and sister, celebrates the Solar New Year.

  5. Original: I wish my parent' s healthy life and my older sister who don't get married, can be married soon.
    Explanation: "Parent' s" is incorrect (no apostrophe needed). "Who don't get married" should be "who isn’t married" for subject-verb agreement and correct tense. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.
    Corrected: I wish my parents a healthy life, and I hope my older sister, who isn’t married, can get married soon.

  6. Original: Usually older children give some money to parents.
    Explanation: This sentence is grammatically correct but could be slightly refined for fluency.
    Corrected: Usually, older children give money to their parents.

  7. Original: It's like korean manner in holidays.
    Explanation: "Korean" should be capitalized, and "in holidays" is awkward. "During holidays" is more appropriate.
    Corrected: It’s a Korean tradition during the holidays.

  8. Original: I've set a goal to improve my English do exercise constantly, do not nag my son.
    Explanation: The sentence lacks conjunctions, and "do exercise constantly" needs to be rephrased for better flow. "Do not nag" should be "not to nag" to match the sentence structure.
    Corrected: I’ve set a goal to improve my English, exercise regularly, and not nag my son.

  9. Original: I will try to keep resolutions.
    Explanation: This sentence is correct but could be slightly refined.
    Corrected: I will try to keep my resolutions.


Final Edited Version

The New Year has arrived. In Korea, people celebrate the Lunar New Year. However, we don’t have enough time because of the ancestral memorial service. So, my family, along with my parents and sister, celebrates the Solar New Year. I wish my parents a healthy life, and I hope my older sister, who isn’t married, can get married soon. Usually, older children give money to their parents. It’s a Korean tradition during the holidays. I’ve set a goal to improve my English, exercise regularly, and not nag my son. I will try to keep my resolutions.


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