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I had some lecture last sunday. Topic is how to study. Famouse mathematician held speech. He wrote a lot of book relate to talented kids education. It was impressive something. The more mom keeps clam in mind, kids can be more successful. Also slow down a tempo face to kids.I got reflect on that I didn't.He said good competition, sense of achievement makes kids to good at study and get more development
Math is based on patient, attention and effort. And he emphasized to read a book.

I had some lecture last sunday. Topic is how to study. Famouse mathematician held speech. He wrote a lot of book relate to talented kids education. It was impressive something. The more mom keeps clam in mind, kids can be more successful. Also slow down a tempo face to kids.I got reflect on that I didn't.He said good competition, sense of achievement makes kids to good at study and get more development
Math is based on patient, attention and effort. And he emphasized to read a book.
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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

  1. Original: I had some lecture last Sunday.
    Corrected: I attended a lecture last Sunday.
    Explanation: "Attended" is more appropriate for participating in a lecture. Use "a lecture" instead of "some lecture" for grammatical accuracy.

  2. Original: Topic is how to study.
    Corrected: The topic was how to study.
    Explanation: Use "The topic was" to indicate past tense and clarify the sentence.

  3. Original: Famouse mathematician held speech.
    Corrected: A famous mathematician gave a speech.
    Explanation: "Famous" was misspelled, and "gave a speech" is the correct expression.

  4. Original: He wrote a lot of book relate to talented kids education.
    Corrected: He wrote many books related to the education of talented children.
    Explanation: Use "many books" for plural and "related to" for proper grammar. "Talented kids" is rephrased to "talented children" for formality.

  5. Original: It was impressive something.
    Corrected: It was quite impressive.
    Explanation: Simplified to make the sentence more natural and concise.

  6. Original: The more mom keeps clam in mind, kids can be more successful.
    Corrected: The calmer a mom keeps her mind, the more successful her children can be.
    Explanation: Improved structure and word choice for clarity and correctness.

  7. Original: Also slow down a tempo face to kids.
    Corrected: Also, slow down your pace when interacting with children.
    Explanation: Rephrased for clarity and correct word usage.

  8. Original: I got reflect on that I didn’t.
    Corrected: I reflected on the fact that I didn’t.
    Explanation: "Got reflect" is incorrect; use "reflected on" and rephrase for clarity.

  9. Original: He said good competition, sense of achievement makes kids to good at study and get more development.
    Corrected: He said that healthy competition and a sense of achievement help children improve in their studies and develop further.
    Explanation: Adjusted sentence structure and vocabulary for better clarity and grammar.

  10. Original: Math is based on patient, attention and effort.
    Corrected: Math is based on patience, attention, and effort.
    Explanation: "Patient" should be "patience" for correct meaning. Added a comma for list consistency.

  11. Original: And he emphasized to read a book.
    Corrected: He also emphasized the importance of reading books.
    Explanation: Rephrased for a natural and grammatically correct expression.


Revised Text:

I attended a lecture last Sunday. The topic was how to study. A famous mathematician gave a speech. He wrote many books related to the education of talented children. It was quite impressive.

He mentioned that the calmer a mom keeps her mind, the more successful her children can be. Also, slow down your pace when interacting with children. I reflected on the fact that I didn’t always do that.

He said that healthy competition and a sense of achievement help children improve in their studies and develop further. Math is based on patience, attention, and effort. He also emphasized the importance of reading books.


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