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Lastly, some people argue that students are not mature enough to grade teachers, but that is not true. Students can grade teachers fairly because they they are more mature than we think. There are a lot of fair and mature student in this world.

Lastly, some people argue that students are not mature enough to grade teachers, but that is not true. Students can grade teachers fairly because they they are more mature than we think. There are a lot of fair and mature student in this world.

 

CORRECTION:

I think children should be able to grade teachers, and here’s why. Firstly, students have the authority to tell teachers what they dislike about them. For example, when we don’t like a teacher's speaking attitude, we can express our feelings by grading them. We can do this because it is our right. Secondly, teachers can learn from their mistakes by being graded by their students. They can improve based on student comments. For instance, some teachers say that they have learned from their mistakes and have improved as a result. Lastly, some people argue that students are not mature enough to grade teachers, but that is not true. Students can grade teachers fairly because they are more mature than we think. There are many fair and mature students in this world.

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Mistakes and Explanations:
 
1. "students has their authorities" → "students have the authority": "Students" is plural, so it should be "have" instead of "has." "Authority" is uncountable in this context, so it should be singular.
 
2. "teachers speaking attitude" → "a teacher's speaking attitude": Use "a teacher's" to show possession correctly.
 
3. "we can tell them by grading them" → "we can express our feelings by grading them": "Express our feelings" is clearer than "tell them."
 
4. "it is our authority" → "it is our right": "Right" is a more appropriate word to use in this context.
 
5. "can be improved by the student comments" → "can improve based on student comments": This makes the sentence more active and direct.
 
6. "had improved better" → "have improved as a result": "Have improved" is the correct tense, and "as a result" clarifies the cause of improvement.
 
7. "students are not mature enough to grade teachers, but that is not true" → "students can grade teachers fairly because they are more mature than we think": This sentence is fine, but I added clarity to the argument.
 
8. "There are a lot of fair and mature student" → "There are many fair and mature students": "Many" is more formal than "a lot of," and "students" should be plural.
 
By making these corrections, your essay becomes clearer and more grammatically correct. Keep practicing, and your writing will continue to improve!

 


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