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My friend who have a same major and I having a issue is our job and kids. As freelancer we have been working now . We can control we want to do time. we paid by them per hour. lessoner tend to more paid another job per hour ,but we don't have regular vacation. So sometimes we hard to set family' some plan. Some Friend want to run an academy. But It's not easy to run because there are many music centers and rent fee is expensive. Finally we finish up our talking to take care for family more.

My friend who have a same major and I having a issue is our job and kids. As freelancer we have been working now . We can control we want to do time. we paid by them per hour. lessoner tend to more paid another job per hour ,but we don't have regular vacation. So sometimes we hard to set family' some plan. Some Friend want to run an academy. But It's not easy to run because there are many music centers and rent fee is expensive. Finally we finish up our talking to take care for family more.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: My friend who have a same major and I having a issue is our job and kids.
    Corrected: My friend, who has the same major as me, and I are discussing issues related to our jobs and kids.
    Explanation:

    • "have" should be "has" because the subject is singular ("my friend").
    • "a same major" should be "the same major" for correct article usage.
    • "having a issue" should be "are discussing issues" for proper grammar and clarity.
    • "is our job and kids" should be rephrased to clarify the topic of discussion.
  2. Original: As freelancer we have been working now.
    Corrected: We are currently working as freelancers.
    Explanation: "As freelancer" should be "as freelancers" for agreement, and "we have been working now" is simplified for clarity.

  3. Original: We can control we want to do time.
    Corrected: We can control how we use our time.
    Explanation: The sentence is unclear and requires rephrasing to convey meaning.

  4. Original: we paid by them per hour.
    Corrected: We are paid by the hour.
    Explanation: Passive voice correction and concise phrasing improve clarity.

  5. Original: lessoner tend to more paid another job per hour, but we don't have regular vacation.
    Corrected: Tutors tend to be paid more per hour in other jobs, but we don’t have regular vacations.
    Explanation: "lessoner" is corrected to "tutors," "tend to more paid" becomes "tend to be paid more," and "vacation" is made plural for consistency.

  6. Original: So sometimes we hard to set family' some plan.
    Corrected: So, it’s sometimes hard to make family plans.
    Explanation: Rephrased for grammar and clarity, using "it’s hard" and "make family plans."

  7. Original: Some Friend want to run an academy.
    Corrected: Some friends want to run an academy.
    Explanation: "Friend" should be plural ("friends") for agreement.

  8. Original: But It's not easy to run because there are many music centers and rent fee is expensive.
    Corrected: But it’s not easy because there are many music centers, and the rent is expensive.
    Explanation: Simplified for clarity, with "rent fee" replaced by "the rent."

  9. Original: Finally we finish up our talking to take care for family more.
    Corrected: Finally, we ended our conversation by deciding to focus more on our families.
    Explanation: Rephrased to improve fluency and accuracy.

Revised Text:

My friend, who has the same major as me, and I are discussing issues related to our jobs and kids. We are currently working as freelancers. We can control how we use our time, and we are paid by the hour. Tutors tend to be paid more per hour in other jobs, but we don’t have regular vacations. So, it’s sometimes hard to make family plans. Some friends want to run an academy, but it’s not easy because there are many music centers, and the rent is expensive. Finally, we ended our conversation by deciding to focus more on our families.


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