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I like a see a movie for my free time. I used to like a genre of action or thriller. After get on in years I've been seeing genre of romance or drama. Since some day I've watched a like it. I've changed favorite genre. We signed up to Netflix cause we show variety english cannel to my son . But I'm using that more. I feel good when get some coffee during seeing movie. I'm a big fan of Blake Lively. Her voice is very charming and beautiful. So I've seeing the gossip girl series again and again.

I like a see a movie for my free time. I used to like a genre of action or thriller. After get on in years I've been seeing genre of romance or drama. Since some day I've watched a like it. I've changed favorite genre. We signed up to Netflix cause we show variety english cannel to my son . But I'm using that more. I feel good when get some coffee during seeing movie. I'm a big fan of Blake Lively. Her voice is very charming and beautiful. So I've seeing the gossip girl series again and again.

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Corrected Text:

I like watching movies in my free time. I used to enjoy action or thriller genres. After getting older, I’ve been watching romance or drama genres. One day, I started liking them, and my favorite genre changed. We signed up for Netflix so my son could watch various English channels, but I use it more. I feel good when I have some coffee while watching movies. I’m a big fan of Blake Lively. Her voice is very charming and beautiful. So, I’ve been watching the Gossip Girl series again and again.


Sentence-by-Sentence Corrections:

  1. "I like a see a movie for my free time." → "I like watching movies in my free time."

    • "A see" is incorrect; it should be "watching" to match the sentence structure. "Movies" is plural as it's more natural in this context.
  2. "I used to like a genre of action or thriller." → "I used to enjoy action or thriller genres."

    • "Like a genre of" is awkward. "Enjoy action or thriller genres" is smoother and more concise.
  3. "After get on in years I've been seeing genre of romance or drama." → "After getting older, I’ve been watching romance or drama genres."

    • "Get on in years" is too informal and outdated; "getting older" is clearer. "Seeing" should be "watching," and "genre of" needs to be plural: "genres."
  4. "Since some day I've watched a like it." → "One day, I started liking them."

    • "Since some day" is incorrect. Use "One day" for clarity. "I’ve watched a like it" is rephrased to "I started liking them" for better grammar and meaning.
  5. "I've changed favorite genre." → "My favorite genre changed."

    • "I've changed favorite genre" is awkward. Use "My favorite genre changed" for smoother grammar.
  6. "We signed up to Netflix cause we show variety english cannel to my son." → "We signed up for Netflix so my son could watch various English channels."

    • "Signed up to" should be "signed up for." "Cause" should be "so." "Show variety English cannel" is corrected to "watch various English channels."
  7. "But I'm using that more." → "But I use it more."

    • "I'm using that more" should be simplified to "I use it more" for clarity.
  8. "I feel good when get some coffee during seeing movie." → "I feel good when I have some coffee while watching movies."

    • "When get" should be "when I have." "During seeing movie" is rephrased to "while watching movies."
  9. "I'm a big fan of Blake Lively." → No correction needed.

    • The sentence is correct.
  10. "Her voice is very charming and beautiful." → No correction needed.

    • The sentence is correct.
  11. "So I've seeing the gossip girl series again and again." → "So, I’ve been watching the Gossip Girl series again and again."

    • "I've seeing" should be "I’ve been watching." "Gossip Girl" should be capitalized and italicized as it's a title.

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