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It was about a medical check up. Before the test I didn't eat anymore since at 8. These days I 've been doing control a meal,so It was okay I hold off hunger. We supported the paid from government.and sometimes we have to hand in new results at work every years. I got a gastronomy with sedation too.No problems was found. But doctor said I have a little gastritis.No wonder when I eat something, I feeled like a have a indigestion. So I'm trying to set a meal with nutrients evenly.

It was about a medical check up. Before the test I didn't eat anymore since at 8. These days I 've been doing control a meal,so It was okay I hold off hunger. We supported the paid from government.and sometimes we have to hand in new results at work every years. I got a gastronomy with sedation too.No problems was found. But doctor said I have a little gastritis.No wonder when I eat something, I feeled like a have a indigestion. So I'm trying to set a meal with nutrients evenly.

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It was about a medical check-up. Before the test, I stopped eating after 8 p.m. These days, I've been controlling my meals, so it was okay to hold off hunger. The government supported part of the payment, and sometimes, we have to submit new results at work every year. I had a gastroscopy with sedation too. No problems were found, but the doctor said I have mild gastritis. No wonder when I eat something, I feel like I have indigestion. So, I'm trying to eat meals with nutrients evenly.


Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: It was about a medical check up.
    Corrected: It was about a medical check-up.
    Explanation: "Check-up" should be hyphenated because it is a compound noun.

  2. Original: Before the test I didn't eat anymore since at 8.
    Corrected: Before the test, I stopped eating after 8 p.m.
    Explanation:

    • "Didn't eat anymore" is awkward. "Stopped eating" is clearer.
    • "Since at 8" is incorrect. "After 8 p.m." is the correct phrasing.
  3. Original: These days I 've been doing control a meal,so It was okay I hold off hunger.
    Corrected: These days, I've been controlling my meals, so it was okay to hold off hunger.
    Explanation:

    • "Doing control a meal" is awkward and incorrect. "Controlling my meals" is correct.
    • Added a comma after "These days" for proper sentence structure.
    • "I hold off hunger" is in the wrong tense. "It was okay to hold off hunger" is better.
  4. Original: We supported the paid from government.and sometimes we have to hand in new results at work every years.
    Corrected: The government supported part of the payment, and sometimes, we have to submit new results at work every year.
    Explanation:

    • "We supported the paid" is incorrect. It should be "The government supported part of the payment."
    • "Hand in" is fine, but "submit" is more formal and suitable.
    • "Every years" is incorrect. It should be "every year" (singular).
  5. Original: I got a gastronomy with sedation too.
    Corrected: I had a gastroscopy with sedation too.
    Explanation:

    • "Gastronomy" means the art of cooking, not a medical procedure. "Gastroscopy" is the correct term for the procedure.
    • "Got" is less formal; "had" is better.
  6. Original: No problems was found.
    Corrected: No problems were found.
    Explanation: "Problems" is plural, so "was" should be "were."

  7. Original: But doctor said I have a little gastritis.
    Corrected: But the doctor said I have mild gastritis.
    Explanation:

    • "Doctor" needs "the" before it.
    • "A little gastritis" is awkward. "Mild gastritis" is the correct medical term.
  8. Original: No wonder when I eat something, I feeled like a have a indigestion.
    Corrected: No wonder when I eat something, I feel like I have indigestion.
    Explanation:

    • "Feeled" is incorrect. The past tense of "feel" is "felt," but here, it should be present tense "feel" to match the sentence.
    • "A indigestion" is incorrect because "indigestion" is uncountable.
  9. Original: So I'm trying to set a meal with nutrients evenly.
    Corrected: So, I'm trying to eat meals with nutrients evenly.
    Explanation:

    • "Set a meal" is awkward. "Eat meals" makes more sense.
    • Added "evenly" to emphasize balanced nutrients.

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