Lastly, some people believe that musicians do not earn much money but this is not true. Musicians actually earn a lot of money by selling music.
CORRECTION:
I think downloading music without paying is wrong. First of all, downloading music without paying is illegal. This rule is set by the law, and if we break it by downloading music for free, we should be punished. Secondly, musicians make money by selling their music. If people download their music illegally, musicians won’t be able to earn money. As a result, they might change careers and stop making music. These are the consequences of illegally downloading music. Lastly, some people believe that musicians don’t earn much money, but this is not true. Musicians actually earn a lot by selling their music.
Here are the corrections I made:
- Changed "downloading music we still paying" to "downloading music without paying" for clarity.
- Reworded "this rule is decided by the law" to "this rule is set by the law" for more natural phrasing.
- Simplified the sentence about punishment and consequences for easier understanding.
- Improved sentence flow, like "they will not be able to earn money" instead of "they will not able to earn money."
- Clarified the idea that musicians earn money by selling music.
These changes make the writing clearer and easier to read.
