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The Cherry Tree

The Legend of George Washington and The Cherry Tree
One day, George Washington got a hatchet when he was 6 years old. Once he had been very excited and chopped with it many trees, he cut a cherry tree. So, his father was angry. But he said the truth to him. And his father was joyful about his son's deal truly.

The Legend of George Washington and The Cherry Tree
One day, George Washington got a hatchet when he was 6 years old. Once he had been very excited and chopped with it many trees, he cut a cherry tree. So, his father was angry. But he said the truth to him. And his father was joyful about his son's deal truly.

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Revised Story:

The Legend of George Washington and the Cherry Tree

One day, George Washington got a hatchet when he was 6 years old. He was very excited and chopped down many trees with it. He also cut down a cherry tree. His father became angry, but George told him the truth. His father was happy about his son's honesty.



Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: One day, George Washington got a hatchet when he was 6 years old.
    Corrected: One day, George Washington got a hatchet when he was 6 years old.
    Explanation: This sentence is already correct! 😊

  2. Original: Once he had been very excited and chopped with it many trees, he cut a cherry tree.
    Corrected: He was very excited and chopped down many trees with it. He also cut down a cherry tree.
    Explanation:

    • "Once he had been" is confusing. We replaced it with "He was" to make it clearer.
    • "chopped with it many trees" is unnatural. "Chopped down many trees with it" is the correct order.
    • Adding "He also" makes the events flow better.
  3. Original: So, his father was angry.
    Corrected: His father became angry.
    Explanation: "Became" is better for describing how someone starts to feel.

  4. Original: But he said the truth to him.
    Corrected: But George told him the truth.
    Explanation:

    • "He" should be replaced with "George" for clarity.
    • "Said the truth" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "told the truth."
  5. Original: And his father was joyful about his son's deal truly.
    Corrected: His father was happy about his son's honesty.
    Explanation:

    • "Joyful" is okay, but "happy" is simpler and more natural.
    • "Deal truly" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "honesty."

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