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From someday, I've been geting pain a ankle,pelvis for a long time. when I x-rayed I didn't find problem. Doctor said maybe don't have muscle around there.he recommended that muscle exercise to me. So I stared to plataes. I couldn't stay some acting by myself using core in my body.I didn't like exercise but theseday after exercise and sweat I feel get a energy. Every morning I go to gym and I run there during 30minute . I feel like get out stresed. I'm trying to gain health.

From someday, I've been geting pain a ankle,pelvis for a long time. when I x-rayed I didn't find problem. Doctor said maybe don't have muscle around there.he recommended that muscle exercise to me. So I stared to plataes. I couldn't stay some acting by myself using core in my body.I didn't like exercise but theseday after exercise and sweat I feel get a energy. Every morning I go to gym and I run there during 30minute . I feel like get out stresed. I'm trying to gain health.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. From someday, I've been geting pain a ankle,pelvis for a long time.
    Correction: For some time, I've been experiencing pain in my ankle and pelvis.
    Explanation: "Someday" is incorrect in this context because it refers to an unspecified future time. "Getting pain" should be changed to "experiencing pain" for clarity and proper grammar. Additionally, "a ankle, pelvis" is corrected to "my ankle and pelvis" to specify the affected areas.

  2. when I x-rayed I didn't find problem.
    Correction: When I had an X-ray, no problem was found.
    Explanation: The subject "I" cannot find a problem on an X-ray unless the speaker is the doctor. The proper phrasing for undergoing an X-ray is "had an X-ray." The phrase "didn't find problem" is corrected to "no problem was found" for grammatical accuracy.

  3. Doctor said maybe don't have muscle around there.
    Correction: The doctor said I might not have enough muscle in that area.
    Explanation: "Doctor" should include "The" for proper article use. "Maybe don't have" is corrected to "might not have enough" to make it grammatically accurate and convey the meaning more clearly.

  4. he recommended that muscle exercise to me.
    Correction: He recommended muscle-strengthening exercises to me.
    Explanation: "That muscle exercise" is unclear and awkward. "Muscle-strengthening exercises" is more specific and appropriate.

  5. So I stared to plataes.
    Correction: So I started doing Pilates.
    Explanation: "Stared" is corrected to "started," and "to Pilates" is replaced with "doing Pilates" for grammatical accuracy.

  6. I couldn't stay some acting by myself using core in my body.
    Correction: At first, I couldn’t hold certain positions using my core muscles.
    Explanation: The sentence is rephrased for clarity. "Stay some acting" and "core in my body" are awkward and unclear, so they are replaced with "hold certain positions using my core muscles."

  7. I didn't like exercise but theseday after exercise and sweat I feel get a energy.
    Correction: I didn’t like exercising, but these days, I feel energized after working out and sweating.
    Explanation: "Didn’t like exercise" is corrected to "didn’t like exercising" for proper verb form. "Theseday" is corrected to "these days," and "I feel get a energy" is rephrased to "I feel energized" for proper grammar.

  8. Every morning I go to gym and I run there during 30minute .
    Correction: Every morning, I go to the gym and run for 30 minutes.
    Explanation: "To gym" is corrected to "to the gym" to include the necessary article. "During 30minute" is rephrased to "for 30 minutes" for proper preposition use and pluralization.

  9. I feel like get out stresed.
    Correction: I feel like I release stress.
    Explanation: "Get out stresed" is incorrect. The phrase is rephrased as "release stress" for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

  10. I'm trying to gain health.
    Correction: I’m working on improving my health.
    Explanation: "Gain health" is unnatural in English and is rephrased to "improving my health" for better expression.


Revised Text:

For some time, I’ve been experiencing pain in my ankle and pelvis. When I had an X-ray, no problem was found. The doctor said I might not have enough muscle in that area and recommended muscle-strengthening exercises. So, I started doing Pilates. At first, I couldn’t hold certain positions using my core muscles. I didn’t like exercising, but these days, I feel energized after working out and sweating. Every morning, I go to the gym and run for 30 minutes. I feel like I release stress. I’m working on improving my health.


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