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Interpretation Question
"Once an iceberg took seven years to melt."
Q : What does the "once" mean? Does it means "all" or others?

10/17
Yesterday, I cut my little finger while I was peeling an apple with a peeler during the apple tart baking class. It was bleeding from the cut, but my tutor put an antiseptic, hemostatic, and bandage on me. The sore was slightly better after a little, and I could complete my tart deliciously. My family enjoyed my sweet apple tart at home.

Interpretation Question
"Once an iceberg took seven years to melt."
Q : What does the "once" mean? Does it means "all" or others?

10/17
Yesterday, I cut my little finger while I was peeling an apple with a peeler during the apple tart baking class. It was bleeding from the cut, but my tutor put an antiseptic, hemostatic, and bandage on me. The sore was slightly better after a little, and I could complete my tart deliciously. My family enjoyed my sweet apple tart at home.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. "Does it means 'all' or others?"

    • Correction: Change "means" to "mean."
    • Explanation: When we use "does" in a question, the main verb should be in its base form. So, it should be "Does it mean" instead of "Does it means."
  2. "I cut my little finger while I was peeling an apple with a peeler during the apple tart baking class."

    • Correction: This sentence is okay, but we can make it clearer by saying "I cut my little finger with a peeler while I was peeling an apple during the apple tart baking class."
    • Explanation: Moving "with a peeler" makes it clear that the peeler is what caused the cut, not something else.
  3. "but my tutor put an antiseptic, hemostatic, and bandage on me."

    • Correction: Change the comma before "hemostatic" to "and" to make it clearer.
    • Explanation: When listing three things, use "and" before the last item to show they are all connected. It should be "put an antiseptic and hemostatic on me, and then a bandage."
  4. "The sore was slightly better after a little, and I could complete my tart deliciously."

    • Correction: Change "after a little" to "after a little while" and "complete my tart deliciously" to "finish making my tart."
    • Explanation: "After a little while" sounds better and makes more sense, and "finish making my tart" is clearer than "complete my tart deliciously."
  5. "My family enjoyed my sweet apple tart at home."

    • Correction: This sentence is fine, but we can add "very" to make it sound even better: "My family really enjoyed my sweet apple tart at home."
    • Explanation: Adding "really" makes it sound like they enjoyed it even more!


Revised Text:

Interpretation Question
"Once an iceberg took seven years to melt."
Q: What does "once" mean? Does it mean "all" or something else?

10/17
Yesterday, I cut my little finger with a peeler while I was peeling an apple during the apple tart baking class. It was bleeding from the cut, but my tutor put antiseptic and hemostatic on me, and then a bandage. The sore was slightly better after a little while, and I could finish making my tart. My family really enjoyed my sweet apple tart at home.

 


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