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my morning routine

I get up about 7:00 AM.
I help my son to prepare to go to the kindergarten. Making a breakfast to him, helping to wash his face, teeth, and choose the clothes to put on.
My son gets in the school bus at 8:49 AM.
I come back home, start to wash dishes, clean the room, listening to music or Youtube.
and I have a phone call for English conversation at 9:30.
After then, I make a daily plan to manage my time. It’s difficult to follow the plan perfectly, but it helps me to live better than yesterday.

I get up about 7:00 AM.
I help my son to prepare to go to the kindergarten. Making a breakfast to him, helping to wash his face, teeth, and choose the clothes to put on.
My son gets in the school bus at 8:49 AM.
I come back home, start to wash dishes, clean the room, listening to music or Youtube.
and I have a phone call for English conversation at 9:30.
After then, I make a daily plan to manage my time. It’s difficult to follow the plan perfectly, but it helps me to live better than yesterday.
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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

  1. Original: I get up about 7:00 AM.
    Correction: I get up around 7:00 AM.
    Explanation: "Around" is more natural when talking about approximate times.

  2. Original: I help my son to prepare to go to the kindergarten.
    Correction: I help my son get ready to go to kindergarten.
    Explanation: "Get ready" is more commonly used in this context, and "kindergarten" doesn't need "the" because it's a general reference to the institution, not a specific one.

  3. Original: Making a breakfast to him, helping to wash his face, teeth, and choose the clothes to put on.
    Correction: I make him breakfast, help him wash his face and brush his teeth, and help him choose his clothes.
    Explanation: Use "make him breakfast" for natural phrasing, and "help him wash" and "brush his teeth" are the more common verbs used. "Choose his clothes" is also simplified for clarity.

  4. Original: My son gets in the school bus at 8:49 AM.
    Correction: My son gets on the school bus at 8:49 AM.
    Explanation: "Gets on" is the correct phrasal verb when talking about boarding vehicles.

  5. Original: I come back home, start to wash dishes, clean the room, listening to music or Youtube.
    Correction: I come back home, start washing the dishes, clean the room, and listen to music or watch YouTube.
    Explanation: Use the gerund ("start washing") for smoother flow, and "listen to music or watch YouTube" for more natural phrasing.

  6. Original: and I have a phone call for English conversation at 9:30.
    Correction: Then, I have an English conversation phone call at 9:30.
    Explanation: Starting with "Then" connects the sentence better, and "English conversation phone call" is clearer and more concise.

  7. Original: After then, I make a daily plan to manage my time.
    Correction: After that, I make a daily plan to manage my time.
    Explanation: "After that" is the correct phrase, while "after then" is not standard English.

  8. Original: It’s difficult to follow the plan perfectly, but it helps me to live better than yesterday.
    Correction: It's difficult to follow the plan perfectly, but it helps me live better than I did yesterday.
    Explanation: "Helps me live" is smoother without "to," and "than I did yesterday" clarifies the comparison.


Revised Text:

I get up around 7:00 AM. I help my son get ready to go to kindergarten. I make him breakfast, help him wash his face and brush his teeth, and help him choose his clothes. My son gets on the school bus at 8:49 AM. I come back home, start washing the dishes, clean the room, and listen to music or watch YouTube. Then, I have an English conversation phone call at 9:30. After that, I make a daily plan to manage my time. It's difficult to follow the plan perfectly, but it helps me live better than I did yesterday.


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