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She apologized for being late, and then she told me why she got lost and wandered the streets on an unfamiliar street for over 45 minutes. I hope my mom won’t wander around a street that she doesn’t know ever again. 10/3 We set off on our family trip that we had been eagerly looking forward to. We arrived at our pension, and I was satisfied with the room's as good as I hoped.

She apologized for being late, and then she told me why she got lost and wandered the streets on an unfamiliar street for over 45 minutes. I hope my mom won’t wander around a street that she doesn’t know ever again. 10/3 We set off on our family trip that we had been eagerly looking forward to. We arrived at our pension, and I was satisfied with the room's as good as I hoped.
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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

  1. She apologized for being late, and then she told me why she got lost and wandered the streets on an unfamiliar street for over 45 minutes.

    • Correction: "She apologized for being late, and then she told me why she got lost and wandered around on an unfamiliar street for over 45 minutes."
    • Explanation: We say "wandered around" instead of just "wandered" because it sounds more natural when talking about moving around a place. Also, "on an unfamiliar street" is corrected to mean she was moving around that street.
  2. I hope my mom won’t wander around a street that she doesn’t know ever again.

    • Correction: "I hope my mom won’t wander around a street she doesn’t know ever again."
    • Explanation: We can drop "that" because it's not needed. It makes the sentence sound smoother.
  3. 10/3 We set off on our family trip that we had been eagerly looking forward to.

    • Correction: "On October 3rd, we set off on our family trip that we had been eagerly looking forward to."
    • Explanation: "10/3" should be written out as "October 3rd" to make it clearer when we are talking about the date.
  4. We arrived at our pension, and I was satisfied with the room's as good as I hoped.

    • Correction: "We arrived at our pension, and I was satisfied with the room, which was as good as I had hoped."
    • Explanation: The phrase "room's as good as I hoped" needs to be changed to "room, which was as good as I had hoped" to clearly explain that the room met your expectations.
       

Revised Text:

She apologized for being late, and then she told me why she got lost and wandered around on an unfamiliar street for over 45 minutes. I hope my mom won’t wander around a street she doesn’t know ever again. On October 3rd, we set off on our family trip that we had been eagerly looking forward to. We arrived at our pension, and I was satisfied with the room, which was as good as I had hoped.


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