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We've been married for 10years.As got a married as we having a baby.Come to think of it now,It was suprised. because we didn't prepared it and planed go to study more abroad after wedding. although We changed plan set up but My son came to us we were happy and still now. I seemed to best choice that weddining with my men and have a baby. This weekend, I was having a thanksfull to them. We promised each other to do everything as we can as best and happliy. Thanks to my family.

We've been married for 10years.As got a married as we having a baby.Come to think of it now,It was suprised. because we didn't prepared it and planed go to study more abroad after wedding. although We changed plan set up but My son came to us we were happy and still now. I seemed to best choice that weddining with my men and have a baby. This weekend, I was having a thanksfull to them. We promised each other to do everything as we can as best and happliy. Thanks to my family.

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  1. Original: We've been married for 10 years.

    • Error: Missing space between "10" and "years."
    • Explanation: There needs to be a space between the number and the unit.
    • Correction: We've been married for 10 years.
  2. Original: As got a married as we having a baby.

    • Error: Confusing structure and verb tense errors.
    • Explanation: The sentence needs to clarify when they got married and had a baby. The correct form would be "We got married as soon as we had a baby," or it can be split into separate ideas.
    • Correction: We got married when we found out we were having a baby.
  3. Original: Come to think of it now, It was suprised.

    • Error: Incorrect word form and missing article.
    • Explanation: "Suprised" should be "surprising," and the sentence needs to be connected for better flow.
    • Correction: Come to think of it now, it was quite surprising.
  4. Original: because we didn't prepared it and planed go to study more abroad after wedding.

    • Error: Verb tense, missing words, and spelling.
    • Explanation: "Didn't prepare" should be "didn't prepare for it," "planed" should be "planned," and "go to" should be "to go." Also, it should start with a capital letter.
    • Correction: Because we hadn’t prepared for it and had planned to go abroad for further studies after the wedding.
  5. Original: although We changed plan set up but My son came to us we were happy and still now.

    • Error: Grammar, punctuation, and word choice.
    • Explanation: This needs rewording for clarity. "Changed plan set up" is incorrect, and the sentence structure is awkward.
    • Correction: Although we changed our plans, when our son came into our lives, we were happy then and still are now.
  6. Original: I seemed to best choice that weddining with my men and have a baby.

    • Error: Grammar, word choice, and spelling.
    • Explanation: "Seemed" should be "It seems," "best choice" should be "the best choice," "weddining" should be "wedding," "my men" should be "my husband," and the phrase "and have a baby" needs clarification.
    • Correction: It seems that marrying my husband and having a baby was the best choice I made.
  7. Original: This weekend, I was having a thanksfull to them.

    • Error: Incorrect verb tense and word form.
    • Explanation: "Was having a thankful" is incorrect. It should be "felt thankful."
    • Correction: This weekend, I felt very thankful for them.
  8. Original: We promised each other to do everything as we can as best and happliy.

    • Error: Awkward phrasing, word order, and spelling.
    • Explanation: "As we can as best" should be rephrased, and "happliy" should be "happily."
    • Correction: We promised each other to do our best in everything we can, and to live happily.
  9. Original: Thanks to my family.

    • Error: None.
    • Explanation: This is correct, though it could be slightly expanded for better flow.
    • Correction: I am grateful to my family.

Final Corrected Text:

We've been married for 10 years. We got married when we found out we were having a baby. Come to think of it now, it was quite surprising, because we hadn’t prepared for it and had planned to go abroad for further studies after the wedding. Although we changed our plans, when our son came into our lives, we were happy then and still are now. It seems that marrying my husband and having a baby was the best choice I made. This weekend, I felt very thankful for them. We promised each other to do our best in everything we can, and to live happily. I am grateful to my family.


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