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I visited my grandparents at Chuseok. I had a lot of delicious food and hung out with my cousin as we had a pillow fight and enjoyed ball throwing and catching. Besides, my family and my cousin's family went to the Han River at night. We went for a walk there, and then I and my cousin rode a scooter or kicked a soccer ball. It was enjoyable, but I was exhausted because we played roughly and the weather was still humid.

I visited my grandparents at Chuseok. I had a lot of delicious food and hung out with my cousin as we had a pillow fight and enjoyed ball throwing and catching. Besides, my family and my cousin's family went to the Han River at night. We went for a walk there, and then I and my cousin rode a scooter or kicked a soccer ball. It was enjoyable, but I was exhausted because we played roughly and the weather was still humid.

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Here are the corrections, explanations, and the final corrected text:

Corrections & Explanations:

  1. "I visited my grandparents at Chuseok."

    • Correction: "at Chuseok" is correct, but "during Chuseok" sounds more natural.
    • Corrected: "I visited my grandparents during Chuseok."
  2. "I had a lot of delicious food and hung out with my cousin as we had a pillow fight and enjoyed ball throwing and catching."

    • Correction: The sentence is generally correct, but "hung out" could be changed to "spent time with" for variety. Also, "ball throwing and catching" could be made smoother.
    • Corrected: "I had a lot of delicious food and spent time with my cousin, having a pillow fight and playing catch."
  3. "Besides, my family and my cousin's family went to the Han River at night."

    • Correction: "Besides" is typically used to add information, but it feels slightly awkward here. "Also" or "In addition" would flow better.
    • Corrected: "In addition, my family and my cousin's family went to the Han River at night."
  4. "We went for a walk there, and then I and my cousin rode a scooter or kicked a soccer ball."

    • Correction: "I and my cousin" should be changed to "my cousin and I" as it's the correct order in English. "Rode a scooter or kicked a soccer ball" implies that either activity happened, but not both. Change "or" to "and" for clarity.
    • Corrected: "We went for a walk there, and then my cousin and I rode a scooter and kicked a soccer ball."
  5. "It was enjoyable, but I was exhausted because we played roughly and the weather was still humid."

    • Correction: "Played roughly" can be interpreted in multiple ways, but "played hard" would be clearer. Otherwise, this sentence is good.
    • Corrected: "It was enjoyable, but I was exhausted because we played hard, and the weather was still humid."

Final Corrected Text:

I visited my grandparents during Chuseok. I had a lot of delicious food and spent time with my cousin, having a pillow fight and playing catch. In addition, my family and my cousin's family went to the Han River at night. We went for a walk there, and then my cousin and I rode a scooter and kicked a soccer ball. It was enjoyable, but I was exhausted because we played hard, and the weather was still humid.


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