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All said that without father -in law. We want to gather immediate family each home simply.My father-in law is eldest son of a family.So many cousin and distance relatives is come to at home. Old men think granted for son of eldest do and Distace relatives get in coming is old custom. Under generation is tired. If my parents-in law don't do that, I could get a that. It's terrible. I said we can't do that instead of them. Mother -in law also has remove opinions. All want harmonious holidays.

All said that without father -in law. We want to gather immediate family each home simply.My father-in law is eldest son of a family.So many cousin and distance relatives is come to at home. Old men think granted for son of eldest do and Distace relatives get in coming is old custom. Under generation is tired. If my parents-in law don't do that, I could get a that. It's terrible. I said we can't do that instead of them. Mother -in law also has remove opinions. All want harmonious holidays.

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FINAL CORRECTED TEXT:

Everyone agreed that it would be without my father-in-law. We just want to gather with our immediate family at home in a simple way. My father-in-law is the eldest son in his family, so many cousins and distant relatives come to our home. The older men believe it's expected for the eldest son’s family to host, as it's an old custom for distant relatives to visit. However, the younger generation is tired of this tradition. If my parents-in-law don’t host, we might end up having to do it, which would be terrible. I told them we can’t take their place and host. My mother-in-law also has her own opinions on the matter. Everyone just wants a peaceful holiday.

Here are the CORRECTIONS:

1. "All said that without father -in law."

  • Explanation: This sentence is incomplete and unclear. It likely means that everyone said something regarding the absence of the father-in-law, but it's missing key information and articles.
  • Correction: "Everyone agreed that it would be without my father-in-law."

2. "We want to gather immediate family each home simply."

  • Explanation: The sentence structure is awkward, and the word choice is unclear. It seems to mean that the speaker wants only immediate family to gather at home in a simple way. Also, "each home" isn't quite right in this context.
  • Correction: "We just want to gather with our immediate family at home in a simple way."

3. "My father-in law is eldest son of a family."

  • Explanation: Missing articles and improper structure. "Eldest son" needs a definite article ("the"), and "of a family" should be clarified to specify which family.
  • Correction: "My father-in-law is the eldest son in his family."

4. "So many cousin and distance relatives is come to at home."

  • Explanation: There are multiple issues: "cousin" should be plural, "is" should be "are" because of the plural subject, "distance relatives" should be "distant relatives," and "come to at home" is incorrect phrasing.
  • Correction: "Many cousins and distant relatives come to our home."

5. "Old men think granted for son of eldest do and Distace relatives get in coming is old custom."

  • Explanation: The sentence is unclear and poorly structured. It seems to suggest that the older generation expects the eldest son's family to host the relatives, as part of an old custom. There are also spelling and grammatical issues ("granted for son of eldest," "distance relatives get in coming," "is old custom").
  • Correction: "The older men believe it's expected for the eldest son’s family to host, as it's an old custom for distant relatives to visit."

6. "Under generation is tired."

  • Explanation: "Under generation" is incorrect phrasing. It likely means that the younger generation is tired of this tradition.
  • Correction: "The younger generation is tired of this."

7. "If my parents-in law don't do that, I could get a that."

  • Explanation: This sentence is confusing. It seems to imply that if the parents-in-law don’t host, the speaker might end up having to do so. "Get a that" makes no sense.
  • Correction: "If my parents-in-law don’t host, we might end up having to do it."

8. "It's terrible."

  • Explanation: This sentence is fine but could be made clearer by elaborating on what "it" refers to.
  • Correction: "That would be terrible."

9. "I said we can't do that instead of them."

  • Explanation: The phrasing is awkward. The speaker seems to be saying that they cannot host in place of their parents-in-law.
  • Correction: "I told them we can’t take their place and host."

10. "Mother -in law also has remove opinions."

  • Explanation: The meaning is unclear, but it likely suggests that the mother-in-law also has reservations or differing opinions. "Remove opinions" is incorrect.
  • Correction: "My mother-in-law also has her own opinions."

11. "All want harmonious holidays."

  • Explanation: This is fine but can be slightly refined for clarity.
  • Correction: "Everyone just wants a peaceful holiday."

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