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When I was snorkeling and diving alone, I met a new friend. We hung out to compare who was faster to reach until we pointed to the spot and who was longer to hold our breath under the water for a long time. She was swimming very well, and I was able to swim naturally while playing with her. It was excited and nice.

I went back to the mountain stream because I wanted to swim and dive. I want to try swimming and diving in a place where the water level is a little higher.

When I was snorkeling and diving alone, I met a new friend. We hung out to compare who was faster to reach until we pointed to the spot and who was longer to hold our breath under the water for a long time. She was swimming very well, and I was able to swim naturally while playing with her. It was excited and nice.

I went back to the mountain stream because I wanted to swim and dive. I want to try swimming and diving in a place where the water level is a little higher.

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CORRECTED VERSION:
 
When I was snorkeling and diving alone, I met a new friend. We hung out to compare who could reach a designated spot faster and who could hold their breath underwater for longer. She was swimming very well, and I was able to swim naturally while playing with her. It was exciting and enjoyable.

I went back to the mountain stream because I wanted to swim and dive. I would like to try swimming and diving in a place with a slightly higher water level.

 
Here are the CORRECTIONS:
 
"When I was snorkeling and diving alone, I met a new friend."
> This sentence is correct.
 
"We hung out to compare who was faster to reach until we pointed to the spot and who was longer to hold our breath under the water for a long time."
 
Correction: "We hung out to compare who could reach a designated spot faster and who could hold their breath underwater for longer."
Explanation: "Who could reach a designated spot faster" is clearer, and "hold their breath underwater for longer" is more precise.
 
"She was swimming very well, and I was able to swim naturally while playing with her."
> This sentence is correct.
 
"It was excited and nice."
 
Correction: "It was exciting and enjoyable."
Explanation: "Excited" is incorrect here; "exciting" describes the situation. "Nice" is less specific than "enjoyable."
 
"I went back to the mountain stream because I wanted to swim and dive."
> This sentence is correct.
 
"I want to try swimming and diving in a place where the water level is a little higher."
> This sentence is correct.
 

 


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