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My mom hated it, saying it was an invasion of privacy. They suddenly informed her last night that the filming of the drama would begin near my house the next day. So, she would have to plan to go out. There's no TV in my home, and no one is interested in the media. I'd like to visit the indoor zoo again with my dad and mom?the three of us.

My mom hated it, saying it was an invasion of privacy. They suddenly informed her last night that the filming of the drama would begin near my house the next day. So, she would have to plan to go out. There's no TV in my home, and no one is interested in the media. I'd like to visit the indoor zoo again with my dad and mom?the three of us.

Corrections and Explanations:

  1. "My mom hated it, saying it was an invasion of privacy."

    • Changed to: "My mom was upset, saying it was an invasion of privacy."
    • Explanation: "Was upset" is a more nuanced way to describe her feelings, while "hated it" might sound too strong. This makes the sentence more balanced and natural.
  2. "They suddenly informed her last night that the filming of the drama would begin near my house the next day."

    • Changed to: "They informed her unexpectedly last night that the drama filming would begin near our house the next day."
    • Explanation: "Informed her unexpectedly" provides a clearer sense of the surprise involved. "Near our house" is a more inclusive phrase, assuming the speaker lives there as well.
  3. "So, she would have to plan to go out."

    • Changed to: "As a result, she had to make plans to go out."
    • Explanation: "As a result" clearly links the cause and effect, and "make plans" sounds more deliberate than "plan."
  4. "There's no TV in my home, and no one is interested in the media."

    • Changed to: "We don't have a TV at home, and none of us are particularly interested in the media."
    • Explanation: "We don't have a TV" is more straightforward and inclusive, and "none of us are particularly interested" softens the statement to sound more natural.
  5. "I'd like to visit the indoor zoo again with my dad and mom?the three of us."

    • Changed to: "I'd like to visit the indoor zoo again with both my mom and dad—the three of us together."
    • Explanation: "Both my mom and dad" is a smoother way to list the parents, and "the three of us together" adds emphasis on the family unity.

Corrected Version:

My mom was upset, saying it was an invasion of privacy. They informed her unexpectedly last night that the drama filming would begin near our house the next day. As a result, she had to make plans to go out. We don't have a TV at home, and none of us are particularly interested in the media. I'd like to visit the indoor zoo again with both my mom and dad—the three of us together.


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