영작교정
목록
완료

Fan fiction

My daughter has been out of control these days due to doing her own work, which is writing some stories.
She never reads and studies these days.
There's no goal of her at this moment I think. I am worring a lot of her, but she doesn't care about it.
There are a few characters in her story and they are all singers. They are belong to one boy group, Seventeen.
Many teenagers seem to write stories as my daughter and they said that it is 'Fan Fic'.
I think that it is waisted of time.

My daughter has been out of control these days due to doing her own work, which is writing some stories.
She never reads and studies these days.
There's no goal of her at this moment I think. I am worring a lot of her, but she doesn't care about it.
There are a few characters in her story and they are all singers. They are belong to one boy group, Seventeen.
Many teenagers seem to write stories as my daughter and they said that it is 'Fan Fic'.
I think that it is waisted of time.

_____________

Corrected Version:

My daughter has been out of control lately because she’s been focused on writing her own stories. She hasn’t been reading or studying recently. It seems like she has no clear goals at the moment, and I’m very worried about her, but she doesn’t seem to care. Her stories feature characters who are all singers from a boy group called Seventeen. Many teenagers write similar stories, calling them "fan fiction." I think it’s a waste of time.

 

Suggested Proper Way to Say:

My daughter has been preoccupied lately with writing her own stories, and as a result, she hasn’t been reading or studying. It seems like she doesn’t have any clear goals right now, and I’m quite concerned, but she doesn’t seem to be bothered by it. Her stories include characters who are all members of the boy group Seventeen. Many teenagers write similar stories, which are known as "fan fiction." I feel that this may be a waste of time

_____________

Hi Tina,

I admire your ability to express yourself and your commitment to practicing writing to improve your language skills. Your hard work and dedication are truly impressive. Keep pushing yourself and exploring new ideas in your writing; every effort you make brings you closer to your goals. Remember, every writer starts somewhere, and your enthusiasm will lead to great progress. Stay motivated and keep up the fantastic work!


수강정보
필리핀 전화영어 주 2회 10분 4주
튜터
Edleth
교재
APEX English 2
[시니어] 정규
번호
제목
작성자
튜터
작성일
6275
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Sunghyun's Diary
Sunghyun
Joel
2024.08.13
6274
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] My sadness time .
kim bo min
Sydelle
2024.08.13
6273
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] My break last weekend
이진아
Joel
2024.08.13
6272
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] I went to a seoul.
박수연
Alexandra
2024.08.13
6271
완료
[164번째 영작 첨삭] 2NIGHTS 3DAYS TRIP TO YONG PYONG
Aiden
Aya
2024.08.12
6270
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] First day of Joy English
이선우
Marie
2024.08.12
6269
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Books VS Smartphones
Daniel
Edleth
2024.08.12
6268
완료
[131번째 영작 첨삭] Employ
Rachel
Bel
2024.08.09
6267
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] Today is friday .
kim bo min
Sydelle
2024.08.09
6266
완료
[32번째 영작 첨삭] Eyesight
Yoon
Anna
2024.08.09
6265
완료
[12번째 영작 첨삭] bandana weiddley
LEN
Queen
2024.08.09
6264
완료
[4번째 영작 첨삭] I am so excted.
김혜진
Gwen
2024.08.08
6263
완료
[18번째 영작 첨삭] My dream future
JiHu
Gresha
2024.08.08
6262
완료
[29번째 영작 첨삭] 8/3
Min
Anna
2024.08.08
6261
완료
[17번째 영작 첨삭] Novac Djokovic
JiHu
Gresha
2024.08.08
6260
완료
[13번째 영작 첨삭] Hang out
유미
Janine
2024.08.08
6259
완료
[5번째 영작 첨삭] Medical check result
노희주
Edleth
2024.08.08
6258
완료
[5번째 영작 첨삭] Wednesday 8/7 2024 Jason
Jason Kwon
Pia
2024.08.07
6257
완료
[130번째 영작 첨삭] Fake goods.
Rachel
Bel
2024.08.07
6256
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] Hello, Ayi teacher.
Peter
Ayi
2024.08.06

초대한 친구가 수업을 등록하면
무료 수업 1회를 드려요!

무료 수업 1회
초대한 친구가 회원 가입 및 수강권 결제 후 수업을 등록하면
두 사람 모두 무료 수업 1회 수강권을 받아요!
Step 01. 조이영어로 친구를 초대해 보세요!
https://joy05.co.kr
Step 02. 인증하기
초대한 친구가 수업 등록을 완료하면, 고객센터로 수업을 등록한 친구의 '아이디' 또는 '이름 + 휴대폰 번호 뒷자리'를 남겨주세요!
*자녀 혹은 학부모 이름으로 가입하신 경우, 실제 회원가입하신 수강생 이름으로 적어주세요!
Ex. 친구 아이디: joy5205 / 친구 이름: 김조이, 9876
Step 03. 혜택받기
고객센터를 통해 인증하신 내용이 확인되면, 혜택을 적용해드립니다!

Zoom 화상수업 가이드

1. Zoom 설치하기
아래 링크에 접속하여 Zoom 프로그램을 설치합니다.
2. 수강실 입장하기
1) 조이영어 홈페이지 로그인 후 강의실에서 [수강실 입장] 버튼을 클릭해주세요.
2) 버튼을 누르고 Zoom 프로그램 열기 허용 → 컴퓨터 오디오로 참가를 누르면 튜터와 연결됩니다.
3. Zoom 이용에 다른 문의사항이 있으신가요?
조이영어 학습매니저에게 연락주시면 수업에 관련된 문의사항을 친절히 상담해드리겠습니다.
  • 카카오톡 상담 채널 : @조이영어
  • 조이영어 고객센터 : 1899-8695 (운영시간 : 월~금 9:00~17:30)

이용약관

개인정보취급방침