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My daughter has been out of control these days due to doing her own work, which is writing some stories.
She never reads and studies these days.
There's no goal of her at this moment I think. I am worring a lot of her, but she doesn't care about it.
There are a few characters in her story and they are all singers. They are belong to one boy group, Seventeen.
Many teenagers seem to write stories as my daughter and they said that it is 'Fan Fic'.
I think that it is waisted of time.

My daughter has been out of control these days due to doing her own work, which is writing some stories.
She never reads and studies these days.
There's no goal of her at this moment I think. I am worring a lot of her, but she doesn't care about it.
There are a few characters in her story and they are all singers. They are belong to one boy group, Seventeen.
Many teenagers seem to write stories as my daughter and they said that it is 'Fan Fic'.
I think that it is waisted of time.

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Corrected Version:

My daughter has been out of control lately because she’s been focused on writing her own stories. She hasn’t been reading or studying recently. It seems like she has no clear goals at the moment, and I’m very worried about her, but she doesn’t seem to care. Her stories feature characters who are all singers from a boy group called Seventeen. Many teenagers write similar stories, calling them "fan fiction." I think it’s a waste of time.

 

Suggested Proper Way to Say:

My daughter has been preoccupied lately with writing her own stories, and as a result, she hasn’t been reading or studying. It seems like she doesn’t have any clear goals right now, and I’m quite concerned, but she doesn’t seem to be bothered by it. Her stories include characters who are all members of the boy group Seventeen. Many teenagers write similar stories, which are known as "fan fiction." I feel that this may be a waste of time

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Hi Tina,

I admire your ability to express yourself and your commitment to practicing writing to improve your language skills. Your hard work and dedication are truly impressive. Keep pushing yourself and exploring new ideas in your writing; every effort you make brings you closer to your goals. Remember, every writer starts somewhere, and your enthusiasm will lead to great progress. Stay motivated and keep up the fantastic work!


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