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Doctor recomended me to have at least 2 packs of yogurt every day. I tried two weeks and I found that the price of yogurt is too expensive if I eat them.
So I found that another way to save the money. There are many people who made Greek yogurt by themselves. I could find various ways to make it through internet.
When I buy 8 packs of small greek yogurt at market I have to pay around 6-7$ at least. I bought 2 bottles of 1L yogurt as similar price. I made the Greek yogurt today.

Doctor recomended me to have at least 2 packs of yogurt every day. I tried two weeks and I found that the price of yogurt is too expensive if I eat them.
So I found that another way to save the money. There are many people who made Greek yogurt by themselves. I could find various ways to make it through internet.
When I buy 8 packs of small greek yogurt at market I have to pay around 6-7$ at least. I bought 2 bottles of 1L yogurt as similar price. I made the Greek yogurt today.

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The doctor recommended that I have at least 2 packs of yogurt every day. After trying this for two weeks, I found that yogurt is quite expensive if I eat it daily. So, I looked for a way to save money. Many people make Greek yogurt at home, and I found various methods online. Buying 8 small packs of Greek yogurt at the market costs around $6-7, but I bought 2 liters of regular yogurt for a similar price. I made Greek yogurt today.

 

Suggested Proper Way to Say:

The doctor recommended that I consume at least 2 packs of yogurt daily. After trying this for two weeks, I realized that buying yogurt regularly is quite costly. To save money, I explored alternatives and discovered that many people make Greek yogurt at home. I found several methods online. While 8 small packs of Greek yogurt cost around $6-7 at the store, I bought 2 liters of regular yogurt for a similar price and made Greek yogurt myself today.


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