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After I informed that I am a little dangerous health condition now, I began to tried to change my diet.
I enjoyed bread and rice a lot, but I have to reduce the amount of having those food.
It was not difficult for me to have salad, however it is very hard to have limited diet. Avoiding bread, rice, potato is too hard to keep the rule for me.
These days I tried a few new menu which I 've been recommended from doctors.
I will try it even though I am feeling hard.

After I informed that I am a little dangerous health condition now, I began to tried to change my diet.
I enjoyed bread and rice a lot, but I have to reduce the amount of having those food.
It was not difficult for me to have salad, however it is very hard to have limited diet. Avoiding bread, rice, potato is too hard to keep the rule for me.
These days I tried a few new menu which I 've been recommended from doctors.
I will try it even though I am feeling hard.

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Corrected Version:

After I was informed that I have a somewhat dangerous health condition, I began to change my diet. I used to enjoy bread and rice a lot, but I need to reduce the amount of these foods. It wasn’t difficult for me to start eating salad, but sticking to a limited diet is very challenging. Avoiding bread, rice, and potatoes is hard for me. Recently, I’ve been trying a few new dishes recommended by my doctor. I will continue to try them, even though it’s tough.

 

Suggested Proper Way to Say:

After being informed about my concerning health condition, I started adjusting my diet. I used to enjoy bread and rice, but I need to cut back on these foods. While incorporating salads into my diet wasn’t difficult, sticking to a restricted diet is quite challenging. Avoiding bread, rice, and potatoes has been tough. Recently, I’ve been trying new meals recommended by my doctor. I will keep trying, even though it’s difficult.


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