My family visited the valley again. I was buying a new water gun, but I took another one from home instead. I used it when we had a water fight with my dad, but it was weak compared to him because he threw water very strongly at me. I looked for and observed the marsh snails with my mom. This time, the water goggles broke, and I thought I would buy them next time. We had a great time eating dinner at a delicious pork cutlet restaurant.
My family visited the valley again. I was buying a new water gun, but I took another one from home instead. I used it when we had a water fight with my dad, but it was weak compared to him because he threw water very strongly at me. I looked for and observed the marsh snails with my mom. This time, the water goggles broke, and I thought I would buy them next time. We had a great time eating dinner at a delicious pork cutlet restaurant.
Here are the corrected sentences with explanations:
Original: My family visited the valley again.
Correction: My family visited the valley again.
Explanation: The sentence is already correct.
Original: I was buying a new water gun, but I took another one from home instead.
Correction: I was going to buy a new water gun, but I took one from home instead.
Explanation: "Going to buy" is more accurate than "was buying" since the purchase did not happen.
Original: I used it when we had a water fight with my dad, but it was weak compared to him because he threw water very strongly at me.
Correction: I used it when we had a water fight with my dad, but it was weak compared to his because he threw water very strongly at me.
Explanation: "Compared to him" should be "compared to his" to refer to the dad's water gun. The sentence is clearer this way.
Original: I looked for and observed the marsh snails with my mom.
Correction: I looked for and observed marsh snails with my mom.
Explanation: "The" is unnecessary before "marsh snails."
Original: This time, the water goggles broke, and I thought I would buy them next time.
Correction: This time, the water goggles broke, so I decided to buy a new pair next time.
Explanation: "Decided" is stronger than "thought," and "a new pair" is clearer than "them."
Original: We had a great time eating dinner at a delicious pork cutlet restaurant.
Correction: We had a great time eating dinner at a delicious pork cutlet restaurant.
Explanation: The sentence is correct.
REVISED TEXT:
My family visited the valley again. I was going to buy a new water gun, but I took one from home instead. I used it when we had a water fight with my dad, but it was weak compared to his because he threw water very strongly at me. I looked for and observed marsh snails with my mom. This time, the water goggles broke, so I decided to buy a new pair next time. We had a great time eating dinner at a delicious pork cutlet restaurant.
수강정보
필리핀 전화영어 주 2회 10분 24주
튜터
Anna
교재
Hand in Hand 3
[주니어]
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