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I really appreciate your help, Charm

Could you correct this effectively? If it is possible, please change it to make it easier to talk. T0T
And could you give me some phrases about introduction and ending part that we talked about today ?
I will be able to memorize them. ^^ Thank you so much for your help!!

I often feel like many different thoughts and feelings are shaking in me and I reflect on them, and it feels like I’m lost in my thoughts. The thoughts are about me, especially my future direction, and my family and friends. So I tried to describe shaking thoughts as swimming fish in a colorful way to highlight diversity and dynamics and that' why the word in the title is called the lake. I also think the constantly chaning thoughts and feelings were as transparent as the scales of the fish so I expressed the transparent feelings in watercolor painting. I drew myself with a tried, weary expression and expressed my thoughtful, quiet appearance in a static tone through drawing in black and white oriental tone. As I am in my mind, I descibed myself as sitting in an abstract space using the features of watercolor painting rather than any particular background. But by placing dynamic graphic form with dry brush to the background, I enhance the feeling of shaking.

Could you correct this effectively? If it is possible, please change it to make it easier for me to say it. T0T.
And, could you give me some phrases about the introduction and ending part that we talked about today? 
I will be able to memorize them. ^^ Thank you so much for your help!! 

I often feel like that my emotions are shaking inside of me and I tried to reflect on them. It feels like that I am always lost in my own thoughts. They are all about me, especially my future, my family and my friends. I tried to describe them like the fish swimming in a colorful way to highlight dynamic diversity, that’s why I called it “the lake”. I also think that the constant changing of my thoughts and emotions are as transparent as the scales of the fish so I expressed these feelings in a watercolor painting. I drew myself with a tired weary expression. It also showed my thoughtful quiet appearance through drawing in black and white using static and oriental tone. As I picture in my mind, I described myself as the person who is sitting in an abstract space using the features of the watercolor paint rather than any particular background. By placing the dynamic graphics with the use of the dry brush to the background, it enhanced my shaken emotions.

**hello Juhui, I put everything what you were trying to say in here, let me know if there are things you wanted to add. There are also some parts I don't understand so I will be asking you about them tomorrow. See you!


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