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When I was young my sight was worst. So I've wore glasses from 6 years. I hate wearing glasses. After I became middlestundent , I've had wore lenses every day.Then when I was 20 ages I got a lasik surgery. My baby looks like bad sight. So I am sorry I give bad genetic to him.
My son' sight was staring shortsight from he was 6 yeras too. He didn't like wearing glasses. He thouht glasses make him ugly . He used to going life without glasses.Now he can were dream lense and he satisfied that.

Here are the corrections:

  1. "When I was young, my sight was worst."

    • Correction: "When I was young, my eyesight was poor."
    • Explanation: "Worst" is a superlative form and is not appropriate here. "Poor" is a more suitable adjective for describing vision.
  2. "So I've wore glasses from 6 years."

    • Correction: "so I wore glasses from the age of six."
    • Explanation: "I've wore" is incorrect; it should be "I wore." Additionally, specify "from the age of six" for clarity.
  3. "I hate wearing glasses."

    • Correction: This sentence is correct but can be combined with the previous one for better flow: "I disliked wearing glasses."
  4. "After I became middlestundent , I've had wore lenses every day."

    • Correction: "After I became a middle school student, I began wearing contact lenses every day."
    • Explanation: Correct "middlestundent" to "middle school student" and "I've had wore" to "I began wearing."
  5. "Then when I was 20 ages I got a lasik surgery."

    • Correction: "When I was 20 years old, I underwent LASIK surgery."
    • Explanation: "20 ages" is incorrect; it should be "20 years old." Also, "got" is informal; "underwent" is more appropriate in this context.
  6. "My baby looks like bad sight. So I am sorry I give bad genetic to him."

    • Correction: "However, my child appears to have inherited my poor eyesight, and I regret passing on this genetic trait."
    • Explanation: "My baby looks like bad sight" is unclear; use "inherited my poor eyesight." "Give bad genetic" should be "passing on this genetic trait."
  7. "My son' sight was staring shortsight from he was 6 yeras too."

    • Correction: "My son's vision began deteriorating and he developed nearsightedness when he was six years old."
    • Explanation: Correct "My son' sight" to "My son's vision," "staring shortsight" to "began deteriorating and he developed nearsightedness," and "from he was 6 yeras" to "when he was six years old."
  8. "He didn't like wearing glasses. He thouht glasses make him ugly."

    • Correction: "He did not like wearing glasses, as he felt they made him look unattractive."
    • Explanation: "Thouht" is a misspelling; correct it to "thought." Use "felt" for a more precise expression and "look unattractive" for clarity.
  9. "He used to going life without glasses."

    • Correction: "He preferred to live without glasses."
    • Explanation: "Used to going life" is incorrect; use "preferred to live."
  10. "Now he can were dream lense and he satisfied that."

    • Correction: "Now, he is able to use contact lenses, which he finds satisfactory."
    • Explanation: "Were dream lense" is unclear; use "contact lenses." "He satisfied that" should be "which he finds satisfactory."

 

REVISED VERSION:

When I was young, my eyesight was poor, so I wore glasses from the age of six. I disliked wearing glasses. After I became a middle school student, I began wearing contact lenses every day. When I was 20 years old, I underwent LASIK surgery.

However, my child appears to have inherited my poor eyesight, and I regret passing on this genetic trait. My son's vision began deteriorating and he developed nearsightedness when he was six years old. He did not like wearing glasses, as he felt they made him look unattractive. He preferred to live without glasses. Now, he is able to use contact lenses, which he finds satisfactory.


 

 


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