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A moment ago, the call was disconnected frequently. I think it happens sometimes because it's an international call. Every time that happens, I feel confused because I don't know what to do. I hope the call connection is better next time. (I am using a translator, etc. If you correct it, I will share it with my child.)

A moment ago, the call was disconnected frequently. I think it happens sometimes because it's an international call. Every time that happens, I feel confused because I don't know what to do. I hope the call connection is better next time. (I am using a translator, etc. If you correct it, I will share it with my child.)
 

Original Sentence: A moment ago, the call was disconnected frequently.

Correction: A moment ago, the call was frequently disconnected.

Explanation: I've moved "frequently" to follow "was" to make the sentence flow more naturally.


Original Sentence: I think it happens sometimes because it's an international call.

Correction: I think this sometimes happens because it’s an international call.

Explanation: I've changed "it happens sometimes" to "this sometimes happens" for better clarity and conciseness.


Original Sentence: Every time that happens, I feel confused because I don't know what to do.

Correction: Whenever that happens, I feel confused because I don’t know what to do.

Explanation: I've replaced "Every time that happens" with "Whenever that happens" to avoid repetition and make the sentence more fluid.


Original Sentence: I hope the call connection is better next time.

Correction: I hope the call connection improves next time.

Explanation: I've changed "is better" to "improves" for a more precise and formal tone.


Original Sentence: (I am using a translator, etc. If you correct it, I will share it with my child.)

Correction: (I am using a translator. If you correct it, I will share it with my child.)

Explanation: I've removed "etc." as it is unnecessary in this context.


Final Corrected Version:

A moment ago, the call was frequently disconnected. I think this sometimes happens because it’s an international call. Whenever that happens, I feel confused because I don’t know what to do. I hope the call connection improves next time. (I am using a translator. If you correct it, I will share it with my child.)


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