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6&7. What is your greatest professional achievement?

6. Why are you leaving your current job?
I was finished contract.
7.When I worked in last winter, I went to field business trip with my team leader in company of once.
that was required blood-sampling of cattle.
I took a venapucture cattle like my senior.
It was first time what I saw cattle,
and was so big but really was cute.
what I did exsanguinate was checked to get some disease or not.
I was so sorry of them but it must have done this.
I was effective that and I wanted to work in field.

6. My contract at my current job has come to an end. While I have learned a great deal and gained valuable experience in my role, I am eager to find new opportunities that align more closely with my long-term career goals. I am particularly interested in exploring roles that allow me to apply the skills I’ve acquired and to continue growing professionally in the farming industry.

 

Note: This response explains the reason for leaving in a positive and forward-looking manner, emphasizing your desire for growth and alignment with your career goals.


Guidance: Keep your answer positive, focusing on what you're looking for in a new opportunity rather than criticizing your current or past employers.

 

 

 


7. Last winter, I went on a field business trip with my team leader at the company. We were required to perform blood sampling on cattle. I conducted a venipuncture on the cattle, similar to how my senior did it. It was my first time working with cattle, and although they were quite large, I found them to be very cute.

The blood samples were taken to check for diseases. Although I felt sorry for the cattle, I understood that this procedure was necessary. This experience was impactful for me, and it reinforced my desire to work in the field.

Note:This version clarifies the situation and your feelings, while maintaining a professional tone.

Guide: What is your greatest professional achievement?

 


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