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It is a popular to stay at a hotel in vacation in korea . Korean calls staycation.During in a hotel , we can facilites using buffet,swimming and so on. Our restroom tiles broken suddenly. I made mistake. I fallen a heavy thing under the tiles. So we couldn't use toilet and we had to reconstruction.we are afraid it might leak under floor house .Luckily my son's academy vacation. We had event for our holiday at hotel. This was summmmer holiday. Thanks to this happening made our refresh.

It is a popular to stay at a hotel in vacation in korea . Korean calls staycation.During in a hotel , we can facilites using buffet,swimming and so on. Our restroom tiles broken suddenly. I made mistake. I fallen a heavy thing under the tiles. So we couldn't use toilet and we had to reconstruction.we are afraid it might leak under floor house .Luckily my son's academy vacation. We had event for our holiday at hotel. This was summmmer holiday. Thanks to this happening made our refresh.

 

Correction Process:

 

  1. It is a popular to stay at a hotel in vacation in Korea.

    • Correction: "It is popular to stay at a hotel during vacation in Korea."

  2. Korean calls staycation.

    • Correction: "Koreans call it a staycation."

  3. During in a hotel, we can facilites using buffet, swimming and so on.

    • Correction: "While staying at a hotel, we can use facilities such as the buffet, swimming pool, and so on."

  4. Our restroom tiles broken suddenly.

    • Correction: "Our restroom tiles suddenly broke."

  5. I made mistake.

    • Correction: "I made a mistake."

    • I fallen a heavy thing under the tiles.

    • Correction: "I dropped a heavy object on the tiles."

  6. So we couldn't use toilet and we had to reconstruction.

    • Correction: "So we couldn't use the toilet and had to undergo reconstruction."

  7. We are afraid it might leak under floor house.

    • Correction: "We were afraid it might leak into the floor below."

  8. Luckily my son's academy vacation.

    • Correction: "Luckily, it was my son's academy vacation."

  9. We had event for our holiday at hotel.

    • Correction: "We planned an event for our holiday at a hotel."

  10. This was summmmer holiday.

    • Correction: "This was our summer holiday."

  11. Thanks to this happening made our refresh.

    • Correction: "Thanks to this, we were able to refresh ourselves."

Revised Version:

It is popular to stay at a hotel during vacation in Korea. Koreans call it a staycation. While staying at a hotel, we can use facilities such as the buffet, swimming pool, and so on. Our restroom tiles suddenly broke. I made a mistake and dropped a heavy object on the tiles. So we couldn't use the toilet and had to undergo reconstruction. We were afraid it might leak into the floor below. Luckily, it was my son's academy vacation. We planned an event for our holiday at a hotel. This was our summer holiday. Thanks to this, we were able to refresh ourselves.


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