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My son's vacation was staring. He planed his rule and list to have to do. Every morning we read a book one day. Then he go to swimming vacations class. During he go to there I do pilates too. He do homework during this time I am trying study english. I 've thought, If I follw his schedule I got a positive person. I had set his plan for him. Before let him do something , I think I should do something regularly. So I think he could do his study smoothly too.

My son's vacation was staring. He planed his rule and list to have to do. Every morning we read a book one day. Then he go to swimming vacations class. During he go to there I do pilates too. He do homework during this time I am trying study english. I 've thought, If I follw his schedule I got a positive person. I had set his plan for him. Before let him do something , I think I should do something regularly. So I think he could do his study smoothly too.

 

Original: My son's vacation was staring.

Correction: My son's vacation is starting.


Original: He planed his rule and list to have to do.

Correction: He planned his rules and list of things to do.


Original: Every morning we read a book one day.

Correction: Every morning, we read a book together.


Original: Then he go to swimming vacations class.

Correction: Then he goes to swimming lessons.

 

Original: During he go to there I do pilates too.

Correction: While he is at his swimming lessons, I do Pilates.

 

Original: He do homework during this time I am trying study english.

Correction: He does his homework while I study English.

 


Original: I 've thought, If I follw his schedule I got a positive person.

Correction: I thought, if I follow his schedule, I will become a more positive person.

 


Original: I had set his plan for him. Before let him do something , I think I should do something regularly.

Correction: I had set his plan for him. Before I let him do something, I think I should do something regularly.

  

Original: So I think he could do his study smoothly too.

Correction: So, I think he will be able to study smoothly as well.

 

Final Corrected Version:

My son's vacation is starting. He planned his rules and list of things to do. Every morning, we read a book together. Then he goes to swimming lessons. While he is at his swimming lessons, I do Pilates. He does his homework while I study English. I thought, if I follow his schedule, I will become a more positive person. I had set his plan for him. Before I let him do something, I think I should do something regularly. So, I think he will be able to study smoothly as well.


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