I was happy. But when we play at last place, I fell and hurt my knee. It was so hurt. I cried. I was sad. Jaewon's father had a bandage. He stick it on my knee. I was feeling better. I was happy again.
I want to the park and play with my little brother(Son of Father's friend, his name is Jaewon) and my little sister. It was fun. We want three playgrounds.
I was happy. But when we play at last place, I fell and hurt my knee. It was so hurt. I cried. I was sad. Jaewon's father had a bandage. He stick it on my knee. I was feeling better. I was happy again.
I went to the park to play with my little brother, Jaewon (son of Dad's friend), and my little sister. We had a lot of fun exploring three playgrounds!
Unfortunately, while playing at the last one, I fell and hurt my knee. It really hurt, and I started to cry. Luckily, Jaewon's dad had a bandage, which he kindly put on my knee. I felt much better right away and was happy again.
Here's what I changed:
- "Want" to "Went" - Changed to show you actually went to the park.
- "Play with" to "to play with" - Added "to" for better sentence flow.
- "Three playgrounds" - Changed to "exploring three playgrounds" for a more descriptive picture.
- "It was so hurt" - Changed to "It really hurt" for clearer phrasing.
- "Stick it" - Changed to "put on" for a more natural way to describe bandaging.
- "Feeling better" - Changed to "felt much better" for increased emphasis on improvement.
