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Today weather was good. No fine dust, no rain, just full of sunshine for all day.
So, I couldn’t stay in house. I went out and cut my hair in salon near my house
And then I stopped by cafe, ordered ice cream latte.

That is my favorite beverage these days. That made with coffee, milk, soft ice cream.
Taste is soft, sweet, sue. So, I always order ice cream latte when i stop by cafe.

In the cafe, I studied English and read internet news. There was amazing news.
News content is that recent some Korea mobile game of average number of visitors per day over the Facebook figures. That is amazing news. Most Korean people use Facebook regardless of age, sex.
Nevertheless, what the game over the Facebook figure is surprise event.

But I’m not going to play the game. Because of If i play the game, would be addicted to the game.
Perhaps, I will spend a lot of time in play the game if I do that. So, I never play the game.
I will spend a lot of time in develop my ability.

Today weather was good. No fine dust, no rain, just full of sunshine throughout the day.
I can't help staying inside so I went to a hair salon nearby my place to have a haircut.
I stopped by cafe and ordered ice cream latte afterwards.

That is my favorite beverage these days. It's made of coffee, milk and soft ice cream.
Taste is soft and sweet (sue) So, I always order ice cream latte when I stop by a cafe.

In the cafe, I studied English and read internet news. (There was amazing news.)
I found an interesting news about the number of people visiting this Korea mobile game on Facebook. That was an amazing news for me. Most Korean people use Facebook regardless of age and gender.
Nevertheless, what the game over the Facebook figure is surprise event.

But I’m not going to play the game. I might be addicted if I will start playing this game. So, I will never play this game.
(Perhaps, I will spend a lot of time in play the game if I do that). 
I'd rather spend a lot of time developing my ability.

 

*NOTE: All the corrections are BOLD AND UNDERLINED above. I also (removed) some words/sentences that is not really useful for your composition. Keep on practicing your writing skill.


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