Nov.10.2023

I want to my aunt's house.
Because my cousin is almost first birthday.
My aunt gave me IVE photo card.
And also gave cinamoral carrier and cinamoral sticker.
I play with my aunt's dog.
My baby brother and I gave snack to dog.
It was happiness day.

I went to my aunt's house.
Because my cousin is almost first birthday. Because it was almost my cousin's first birthday. 
My aunt gave me IVE photo cards.
And also gave cinamoral carrier and cinamoral sticker.
I played with my aunt's dog.
My baby brother and I gave a snack to dog.
It was a happy day.

 

Note: Good day, Jian. I corrected your composition. You did well on this one. However, you have to learn how and when to use a comma. You can observe in my correction how and when to use it. The blue ones are the words that I added, while the green ones are the ones I corrected.