Oct.31.2023 Dairy

After school I went to violin class.
Today was open class. so parent came.
My turn was third.
It was my turn so I do my best way.
when we all done our teacher gave us jelly.
It was so yummy.
It compliment myself.

After school, I went to the violin class.
Today was an open class, so parents came.
My turn was third. I was third.
It was my turn, so I did my best way.
When we were all done, our teacher gave us jelly.
It was so yummy!
I compliment myself.

 

Note: Good day, Jian. I corrected your composition. You did well on this one. However, you have to learn how and when to use a comma. You can observe in my correction how and when to use it. The blue ones are the words that I added, while the green ones are the ones I corrected.