Today, I finished school and I went to my house. I wore to my pajamas. And I allowed to play by my mom. Me:" Mom, do I play game with my friend?" Mom:_"Sure, no problem but you must turn off 8:00p.m. because you must prepared Joy English class. So I could play game. I turned on my computer and I called my friends. We were best team. But we were losed. We weren't sad. Why? We were good!!
Today, I finished school and I went to my house. I wore my pajamas. And I was allowed to play by my mom. Me:" Mom, can I play a game with my friend?" Mom: “Sure, no problem but you must turn it off by 8:00 p.m. Because you must prepare for Joy English class. So, I could play a game. I turned on my computer and I called my friends. We were the best team. But we lost. We weren't sad. Why? Because we were good!!
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