Good day. My name is Joseph park. I became a new service assistant manager with your campany. nice to talk to you.
As your request before. No 5 model has been delayed shipping schedule that from 1March to 5 April.
And NO 6 model added 150ea. We will send to you NO7sample on board. Please give me back your feedback.
additionally, Could you wait to results with product inspection test? I will be send to you as possible as quickly.
Thank you.
Sincerely
ABC company
Dear Mr. lee -> Dear Mr. Lee, [always write the first letter of the name in big letter]
Good day. My name is Joseph park. -> Good day! I am Joseph Park.
I became a new service assistant manager with your campany. nice to talk to you.
⇢ … with your campany. -> in your company [typo]
⇢ nice to talk to you -> Nice to talk to you. [capital letter] or It’s a pleasure to meet you.
⇢ I became -> I am
-> nice to talk to you -> It's a pleasure to meet you.
Corrected -> I am the new service assistant manager in your company. It’s a pleasure to meet you.
As your request before. No 5 model has been delayed shipping schedule that from 1March to 5 April.
Corrected ⇢ As you requested before, No. 5 model shipping has been delayed from March 1st to April 5th.
And NO 6 model added 150ea. We will send to you NO7sample on board. Please give me back your feedback.
Corrected ⇢ And, No. 6 model added 150 ea. We will send you No. 7 sample on board. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with your feedback.
additionally, Could you wait to results with product inspection test? I will be send to you as possible as quickly.
Corrected ⇢ Additionally, [capital letter] could you please wait for the product inspection test result? I will be sending it to you as soon as possible.
Thank you.
Sincerely,
ABC company
