What’s in the Room

hello. My name is Ha-nuel kim, and I live in Jeju island in Korea.
Look around my room. Let’s play a guessing game.
It’s my family. It’s ayellow doll.
What is it?

hello. My name is Ha-nuel kim, and I live in Jeju island in Korea.
Look around my room. Let’s play a guessing game.
It’s my family. It’s ayellow doll.
What is it?

Hello. My name is Ha-nuel kim, and I live on Jeju Island in Korea. Look around in my room. Let’s play a guessing game. It’s my family. What is it? It’s a yellow doll.

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