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hi maribel~ I modified my composion!

topic of it is my dog💕

She is Mong-sil and has living for 10 years

She spent 10 years with my family

So she became senior dog

We are so afraid of her cross the rainbow

We always talk to her
" Stay healthy and live longer with us plz "

She gave us happiness, smile and pleasure

But when she has to go to somewhere,
She will give us sadness

And we will be lost in grief

But we will cherish her forever

So, " Stay healthy and live longer with us plz "

Love amber


And a composition I will wirte is ... my diary!!
Recently my life is so boring. Becasue I go to study room to study customs agent as soon as I get up.
And then I have break time for 2~3 hours in afternoon, and study again.
Last thing of my routine is squash. Of course study and squash both are interested and I enjoy them.
But I think I life is monotonous. So I need something refreshing me! but I don't know what it is... ㅠㅠ
but communication with you is great thing and it boost me to get more interests in English. Thank you ~ ^^
What do you think what I need for this boring lifecycle? I appreciate if you talk about that on next class. haha
so,,,, now I have to go to eat dinner with my family. so, see you on monday!!

hi maribel~ I modified my composion!

topic of it is my dog💕

She is Mong-sil and has lived a ripe age of 10 years

A long but seven decades in a man's life

She was a significant figure,a family

Soon time caught up with her, she became a senior dog

The certainty of her  crossing the rainbow was inevitable,it's unbearable!

With hushed sounds,we whispered to her ear; "heed Mong-sil
stay healthy and live longer with us plz "

She gave us happiness, smile and pleasure the moment she stepped into our home

Strutted and owned us without delay'I was not her human nor was my sister

And she took to my mom' and owned her heart, it was love at first sight.

But when she has to go to somewhere, a rainbow full of her kind.
She will give us sadness

And we will be lost in grief,a keen distress.

But we will cherish her forever in our hearts

In our memories she will have a special place.

So, " Stay healthy and live longer with us plz "

Love amber


And a composition I will wirte is ... my diary!!
Recently my life is so boring. Becasue I go to study room to study customs agent as soon as I get up.
And then I have break time for 2~3 hours in afternoon, and study again.
Last thing of my routine is squash. Of course study and squash both are interested and I enjoy them.
But I think I life is monotonous. So I need something refreshing me! but I don't know what it is... ㅠㅠ
but communication with you is great thing and it boost me to get more interests in English. Thank you ~ ^^
What do you think what I need for this boring lifecycle? I appreciate if you talk about that on next class. haha
so,,,, now I have to go to eat dinner with my family. so, see you on monday!!

 

Hi Amber,I corrected your composition and added some of my own thoughts base on my own experience. I also loss quite a few senior dogs. I also cried buckets when I lost them. As for the other question you asked,life is full of surprises . It is what we make it,maybe it's the routine that is making you feel bored.One day soon you will be very busy after your custom agent course. Do what makes you happy and you will not notice the day,you will not even notice that it has gone by so quickly. How do I spend my day and no feel bored? I do not look at the time ^_^ ,when someone says," here comes Monday", I treat it like it's Friday so the moment it is Friday; the excitement is overwhelming...so there you go,try it!


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